One picture but thousands of poor people are increasingly oppressed.

One picture of sadness and frustration.

A picture of neglect. A picture of endless suffering.

 A picture of truth.

Let’s slide, and muddy roll. But tomorrow a new morning will spring up and green leaves in the corner will rejoice and blossom with a sweet smile.

It’s time to have fun. Who knows?

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1 year ago

A unique take on the “Green” prompt. Many emotions in a few words – suffering, oppression, the unfairness of life, and to top it all off a bit of humor and whimsy. Excellent writing.

Melissa Taggart
Melissa Taggart(@melissa-taggart)
1 year ago

This is lovely Lotchie! A great and well-written story about finding happiness in hardship. I love the imagery between the mud and the green of the leaves. I picture hope versus oppression as being colors such as green and brown. This has many layers, love it!

1 year ago

Lotchie, your micro story is fabulous  ????  ????  You really made my day when you said: “It’s time to have fun. Who knows?” – Absolutely love this attitude. You are exactly right – when the world has gone mad, it is time to have fun!

Keep Writing!

Jess Maynard
Jess Maynard(@jess-maynard)
1 year ago

Really enjoyed this Lotchie! My favorite line is “Let’s slide, and muddy roll.” That line is packing some poetic imagery/feeling with only 5 words, well done.

1 year ago

Lotchie, this is an incredible story – just what micro fiction should be. You’ve combined tragedy, heartache and suffering with hope and humor. Really amazing. You are a great writer! Where is the picture from?

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 year ago

I love this story, Lotchie, I really do! So much said in so few words, but words that hit home. I agree with Fuji, this is just how micro-fiction should be. Good job!

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

I guess the tragedy you describe, like your picture, is inspired from experiences in your country. Many are suffering the conditions you point out, maybe not always with the same kind of optimism you show. Good writing!

Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
1 year ago

Thanks for sending me on a roller coaster of emotions but nevertheless ending on an optimistic note, Lotchie.

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
1 year ago

Lotchie, your story is beautiful and leaves your reader with hope that just maybe tomorrow would be better. There is great contrast and I like the idea that your protagonist looked for something fun to do, even in hardship. Great story!

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

A lovely piece of writing Lotchie, one that leaves you with the feeling that there could be a rainbow around any corner.

Julie Harris
Julie Harris(@julie-harris)
1 year ago

I’m so glad your story got so much recognition, Lotchie. I definitely voted for your story – actually, I can’t get it out of my head! Why? Who knows?

Kayja Daniels
Kayja Daniels(@kayja-daniels)
1 year ago

I love this, Lotchie. I definitely see a timely message in it about finding something to be joyous about in grim circumstances.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 year ago

Congratulations Lotchie! I’m so pleased for you. Celebrate and enjoy your achievement.

Shobana Gomes
Shobana Gomes(@shobana-gomes)
9 months ago

That’s beautiful, Lotchie. At the end of it all, there’s so much hope for better times to come. Kudos to you.

Shobana Gomes
Shobana Gomes(@shobana-gomes)
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9 months ago

You are welcome, Lotchie:)

Lorena Bellano
Lorena Bellano(@lorena-bellano)
4 months ago

Short story yet full of emotions. You got me hooked up in reading it since the first words!
Please, keep up the good work.

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