For as long as I can remember, I’ve had my suspicions about my kid brother.  The clues were always there.  His favourite book, ‘Robin Hood’.  Preferring a bow and arrow to a game’s console.  And the twinkle in his eye whenever the word ‘love’ was mentioned.  A major clue was Valentine’s Day.  He was never anywhere to be found.  Arriving home in the evening, exhausted.

I decided to confront him.  “You’re him, aren’t you?”

“Him who?”

“Cupid!”

It felt ridiculous just saying the word but, as it left my lips, he sprouted a pair of feathered wings!

“Got me!” he grinned.  “Now we can really have some fun!”

***

From the very first day Katy had moved in next door, I’d had a crush on her, but never had the nerve to tell her.  With Valentine’s Day approaching, I decided to enlist my brother’s help.  It felt a little underhanded but I was desperate.

“The good news is…” he enlightened me, “when my arrow enters her heart, she’ll instantly fall in love with you.”

Walking home from school on Valentine’s Day, with Katy and the rest of the gang, I spotted my brother…  floating on a cloud.  Taking aim, he pulled back his bow and… sneezed!  The arrow shot right over Katy’s head, straight into the heart of mean girl, Molly!

Unbelievably, my brother had failed to mention that mistakes couldn’t be rectified until the next Valentine’s Day.  I had a horrendous year!

***

But eventually, Valentine’s Day arrived and once again my brother took aim and fired.

“Nooooo!” I cried, as Katy bent to tie her lace and the arrow struck bossy Brianne, walking behind.  “Not again!”

But Brianne was already heading in my direction!

***

The next time Valentine’s Day came around, I’d virtually given up on me and Katy.  But that’s when a Valentine’s card dropped through the letterbox.  Tucked inside was a photo of Katy’s house. ‘We’re close,’ the card read, ‘but would love to be closer.’

I ran next door faster than a shooting arrow!  Totally oblivious of my little brother’s self-satisfied expression… or cheeky wink!

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
1 month ago

This story is so much fun, Linda. Your poor protagonist having to put up with two years of the wrong girls being in love with him. Lets hope that it’s third time lucky and that the girl of his dreams is all that he hopes she will be. Great job.

Melissa Taggart
Melissa Taggart (@melissa-taggart)
1 month ago

Love this story. Your protagonist has had some bad luck but I always hold onto hope that things will work out for the best. I believe he will find happiness because he does seem to be “aiming” for it. Maybe less sneezing, and bending down to tie laces is the key! Great job, Linda!

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse (@marianna-pieterse)
1 month ago

Linda, I felt sorry for your protagonist having bad luck twice! In the last paragraph I thought he managed to get the girl of his dreams thanks to his own charm, but the ending obviously proved the opposite. Hopefully he won’t be a show-off thinking it was his own doing  ????  This was great fun to read. Fantastic story.

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof (@christer-norrlof)
1 month ago

This was a fun read, Linda. What an adventure for your protagonist to have Cupid as his brother! Good writing.

Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei (@margarida-brei)
1 month ago

Love this humorous story, Linda.

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Greene M Wills
Greene M Wills (@greene-m-wills)
1 month ago

Funny and sweet, with a touch of the haplessness! I really like it!

Allan Neil
Allan Neil (@allan-neil)
1 month ago

Lovely story, Linda. I felt some faint echoes of my own past life in there, though I never had anyone shooting off love arrows for me. I was pretty good at getting myself in trouble! Keep up the good work, there’s some lovely ‘twinkle’ creeping into it.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
26 days ago

Hello, Linda. Your story is so lovely and funny. You have me smiling all throughout my entire read. Well done.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
23 days ago
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You are welcome, Linda.

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