Whisper of Forgotten Spring
Thousands of us queuing, weeping for our once-beautiful world. Surrounded by dying trees, grey skies, a barren landscape, we hardly dare to hope.
She said change must come from within each of us.
We are supplicants, begging for forgiveness.
Can we really change?
We must.
The Healer stands waist-high in the flowing water, receiving us one by one. Each person takes the solemn vow, the lifetime pledge. She gently holds each one underwater until all traces of greed and selfishness are washed away.
With each baptism, a new green leaf unfurls on a skeleton tree.
“Springtime,” someone whispers, remembering.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleA tight and evocative piece ending with a strong couplet and intimations of uncertainty: the skeleton tree, the mere whisper, the hesitant remembrance. This little piece by no means answers its own question in the affirmative and thus skirts sentimental optimism.
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Hello, Julie. It is written with hope. Your ideas about dying trees, grey skies, a barren landscape, then forgiveness and change come using baptism until the springtime for a new green leaf unfurls. Those ideas are truly amazing. It says so much in just a few words. Well done.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you, Lotchie. I worked a lot on this story.
What a sweet optimistic story Julie. If only it was that simple to wash away our horrible characteristics and bring new life to earth.
It wasn’t really that simple for the thousands of people to commit to major changes in their lives. The healer didn’t change their lives – they themselves did. She just gave them a ritual as a turning point.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleChange from within and baptism, entering into another dimension, are wonderful metaphors for a changed attitude to nature and environment. Good job, Julie!
Yes, you grasped the essential meaning of the story. This baptism sounds simple, a washing away of terrible tendencies, but it really represents major life and attitude changes. Such changes “from within” can save us, but it’s up to us to make them.
A beautifully written piece, Julie. Not about music, but there is definitely music in your words, which makes it a joy to read. Love it
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you, Carrie. Music is only one of my passions! Our beautiful planet is another.
Congratulations, Julie.
Thank you so much, Lotchie.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYou’re welcome, Julie.