They come chasing after me like a haunted dream- 

the burning house,

the flying birds,

and the blaring alarms-

one after the other in an endless cycle of chaos. 

A thick layer of ethanol clings onto my fagged limbs, its poisonous residue blackening my insides and clawing at my beloved memories.


The day the crimson devil stripped me of my childhood haven, the elderly timber and its green meadows, it took my heart with it and has never let it go. 

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Voice-Team
Voice-Team(@voice-team)
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5 months ago

Each word matters in this tiny gem. Brief phrases, prose that is almost poetry, set a nightmare scene. Quite an accomplishment for a high school writer.

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
5 months ago

Wow, this is a powerful story, Kaylee. I love how you’ve formatted it, it makes your story more visual. Very nicely done.

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
5 months ago

I love the title, the photo and everything about your story Kaylee. Brilliantly done.

Julie Harris
Julie Harris(@julie-harris)
5 months ago

Wow is right, Kaylee. This story packs quite a punch. Somehow the “flying birds” and the “elderly timber” are especially poignant. You have a great talent. We’re very glad to have you on the Voice Club – a huge welcome to you!

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
5 months ago

Well done, Kaylee. I love it.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
Reply to  Kaylee Shin
5 months ago

You’re welcome. Keep on writing!

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
5 months ago

Kaylee, this is such a sad story. The short lines really add to the feeling of dread and fear your protagonist must have felt. Great story.

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Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
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5 months ago

I so agree with you, Kaylee. I for one am having a hard time thinking of any stories for the “Good News” contest!

Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
5 months ago

Well done, Kaylee. I especially liked your experiments with your sentences.

도영 이
도영 이(@googleuser18)
5 months ago

I like the title.

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Julie Harris
Julie Harris(@julie-harris)
5 months ago

Congratulations on your win, Kaylee. Your story certainly deserved it!

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
5 months ago

Congratulations on your win, Kaylee. Your story was one of my favourites.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
5 months ago

Congratulations, Kaylee.

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