Battled. The sea storm had damaged it grievously, so it recuperated on the harbour floor. A ravenous monster tasted it but the entrée became the eater.       

Autistic sky. Its restlessness mirrored the young girl’s. Forlornly, sitting on the wet riverbank, she pondered over the problem of two men proposing to her. Both were handsome, moral and would make a wonderful husband. 

“Which one to choose?”

An image entered her mind of a blond man caressing another woman. Horrified that this cheater had had the audacity to propose to her. Now clear sighted, she knew that her heart belonged to another. She never questioned the vision nor how it came to her. She placed her bread and cheese on a leaf on the water as a thanks to the bay. 

The creature sent the telepathy. 

Over the years, the creature helped the villagers. Always remaining anonymous. By eating the bellied monsters, it preserved fish for the villagers. When children foolishly fell into the bay it lifted them back onto the river bank. Pirates breaking down the bay entrance were not allowed to reach the village. Swimming around and around, it formed a maelstrom sucking the pirates to oblivion. Their treasures washed up for the village. Thus the creature saved the villagers; they were indebted to it.

Danger came with knives and lies. Suspicion and anger grew as possessions were stolen. When blood was spilled, a rumour whipped around the village that the creature had turned against them. Armed with crude weapons, every man stood along the river bank wanting to banish the creature for bringing woe. The girl, now a mature woman, pleaded with the villagers that the creature was innocent.

“Who is responsible for the crimes?” stole from her lips. The monster implanted a vision of all the men standing on the shoreline. One by one she went through the faces. One was missing – her blond ex-lover! The villagers charged back to the village catching the criminal. 

Bending down to the water, the woman said, “Good news. You can stay, as you are innocent and have always helped us. Thanks.”

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
1 month ago

I did enjoy this story Margarida. The villagers were very lucky that the young woman maintained her faith in the monster, or they could have found their luck changing for the worse. Good job

Greene M Wills
Greene M Wills (@greene-m-wills)
1 month ago

The monster wasn’t the creature but those who didn’t believe in its innocence after all it did for the village. It takes one good person and one belief to make the world a better place. I loved your story!

Allan Neil
Allan Neil (@allan-neil)
1 month ago

A lovely tale with a moral we’d all do well to digest: handsome does not necessarily mean good, nor does an ugly visage represent an evil entity.

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musing mind
musing mind (@musing-mind)
1 month ago

Loved the story. The vivid description of surroundings makes this story even more beautiful.

Melissa Taggart
Melissa Taggart (@melissa-taggart)
1 month ago

Loved all the detail in this story, Margarida. “Autistic sky”, for example and “Battled” being that it was first word in the story grabbed a readers attention right out of the gate. You had an exciting start that carried itself through until the end. I’ve read this four times now and I have to say I love it more with every read. Amazing work!

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago

I love it so much, Margarida. A monster that is a hero. That’s weird. Because if we hear the word monster, it always signifies danger, but in your story, it signifies safety and help. Nice one. 

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago
Reply to  Margarida Brei

That’s awesome.

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