As a merman, I longed to walk on earth. Impossible.

In assembly, Elder Merman repeated how wonderful merfolk life was. “We are nearly immortal. Life is pleasant and full of adventure. Water is everywhere. We have no predators. Our magic rules the elements.”

It was all yada, yada until a shriek of metal pained our ears, trembled our homes, panicked us and caused mermaids to squall.

Elder Merman looked up annoyed, chanted an ancient language and caused the water to swirl. The destructive man-made claw was swept uselessly to the side by hurling waters.

Respect elders; merfolk life is excellent.

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Julie Harris
Julie Harris (@julie-harris)
1 month ago

A very nice story, Margarida. I also really enjoyed your picture, which seems to be a completed jigsaw puzzle. Are you a puzzle person? I know how much you treasure clean water, so I hope your merpeople use their ancient magic to help clean our waters! Excellent writing.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock (@linda-rock)
1 month ago

I really love your picture, Margarida and the story of the merfolk. I smiled at how the Elder Merman was so unimpressed when humans disturbed his wonderful life, shrugging them off and earning respect! A great story.

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse (@marianna-pieterse)
1 month ago

Margarida, Elder Merman sounds like quite a character! Like Linda, I also enjoyed his reaction to the interruption to his ‘perfect’ life. I enjoyed reading your story.

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Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse (@marianna-pieterse)
1 month ago
Reply to  Margarida Brei

Margarida, I would love to read more about Elder Mermaid! I don’t think he was going to be deterred from explaining his perfect life – or his version of it, by some bothersome men!

Emily O'Leary
Emily O'Leary (@emily-oleary)
1 month ago

I love a story about merpeople, also firmly believing there is intelligent life down there. I wrote a piece myself for a past competition, though I’d say mine were possibly a little more aggressive ????

I too would like to hear more from the Elder Merman!

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Emily O'Leary
Emily O'Leary (@emily-oleary)
1 month ago
Reply to  Margarida Brei

It’s funny you say that though, the merpeople I wrote were angry at humans for their pollution of the planet! I think it’s a good way to engage the audience by using fiction to tackle problematic subjects!

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago

This is a great story with a great picture. I tickled and smiled as I read the reaction of the merman elders. Nicely done. Good job, Margarida.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago
Reply to  Margarida Brei

You are welcome, Margarida.

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Juma
Juma (@juma)
6 days ago

What a great story, Margarida! I hope there really are powerful merfolk in the deep – we need some good magic to protect their environment from human folk, sadly.

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