Comparable
It can be the gentle ebb of a crystal-clear tide, lapping at golden sands on a summer’s day. When it’s on your side, you feel buoyant, strong enough to surf even the most fearsome of waves. Empowered. Invincible.
It can also be a force to be reckoned with — the cascading rush of a waterfall as it hits the pool below. The weight of it can crush and drown you, dragging you mercilessly into its icy depths. Powerless. Defeatable.
It’s fluid, but evaporates when the heat is turned up. Sometimes you feel frozen in it.
Just like water…
Is Time.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleWhat a beautifully expressive piece of writing, Emily. And love the comparison between the tangible and intangible things that cause the greatest erosion in life. Very nicely done.
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What an unexpected ending, Emily, you had me at water! Very cleverly done. I loved it!
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Emily, this is the kind of story that would stay with the reader for a long time. I had to read it a few times, not wanting to miss anything. I loved the comparison at the end. When I read it the first time I was eager to see where you were going with the story. I did not expect that ending. It was brilliant and the moment I read it, the… Read more »
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleVery profound and poetic descriptions of water. Love your micro story, Emily.
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Read this through again and was wondering if in the first sentence, it should read “summer’s day” or “summer day?”
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleGuess we all missed that one the first time around, Margarida! Must have slipped away with the tide!!
Tell us what you would like to change, and we’d be glad to correct it, Emily. We also missed that!
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Margarida was right, the first line should have read “summer’s day” !
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What a lovely piece of writing, Emily. It is very eloquent. I love it.
Thank you so much Lotchie!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYou are welcome, Emily.
This is beautiful, Emily. Very poetic, and like others have stated I needed to read it several times because I didn’t want to miss anything. Great content is deserving of absorption, and this sure fits that bill! Rich description in so few words. Fantastic work, Emily!
Ahhh thank you for your kind words Melissa, I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleVery unique and expressive. The last line surprised me. Great writing, Emily!
Thank you Juma!!
A great build-up to an unexpected change of perspective, Emily. Who thought water and time could be described in the same way? Great work!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you so much, Christer!
This was really clever well done I loved it – I had to check the comp was about water and not time lol!
I’m glad you liked it Sandra! I was mulling over the idea of water and just thought how closely some of the words used to describe it could similarly be used for time!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleCongratulations, Emily. Nice one.