And the rains came.

And the crops flourished. And we fed our families. And we were filled with contentment.

And we cut down trees, built tall cities, paved over greenways. And we were filled with pride.

And the rains dwindled. And we trampled the meadows, moved into mansions. And we were filled with greed.

And the rains stopped. And the forests burned. And the crops failed. And the animals disappeared. And we were filled with fear.

And the sidewalks cracked. And a flower pushed through, then a tiny tree. And we watered them with our tears.

 

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1 year ago

We really liked the format, with the repetition of “And we were filled with. . .”  A possible ending could have been “And we were filled with hope.” The story is taut, tension building, yet optimistic in the end.

Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
1 year ago

So simplistic a telling but with a magnitude of wisdom. Thank you Juma.

Susan Dawson
Susan Dawson(@susan-dawson)
1 year ago

A sad cyclical tale.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

It is very metaphorical. It has a great moral lesson. Well done.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 year ago

Such a powerful story, Juma, so much said in so few words. The last lines stay with you.

Melissa Taggart
Melissa Taggart(@melissa-taggart)
1 year ago

The rains provided and humans, as they often do, became selfish. I feel that this is a relevant story that could happen just about anywhere during these times. Nicely done!

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

I love the rhythm and poetic expression of this story, Juma. At the same time as it’s beautifully written, it is filled with sad wisdom, carrying a perspective of humanity’s impact on our world.

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

Congratulations, Juma. A very interesting story 🙂

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
1 year ago

Congratulations, Juma!

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

Congratulations, Juma. Well done.

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

Congratulations, Juma.

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