I stood on the precipice, looking out across the barren land, all hope lost. I’d been alone for months, barely surviving. I thought of the life I’d lived before, all the happy times I’d shared with family.

One foot hovered over the edge, and stilled. Part of a monologue I’d heard, long ago, came to mind.

All those moments will be lost in time, like tears in rain…

I couldn’t let those memories wash away. I pulled my foot back, seeing a plume of smoke in the distance, sign at last of civilisation. It was not my time to die.

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Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
4 months ago

Your micro writing Carrie, has a true resonance. It reminds me of “The Tree” because both are sad apocalyptic stories.

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Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
4 months ago

Carrie, this story is beautifully written and compelling. It’s such a contrast with many of your other stories. The title alone drew me in. You’ve built a great story around a very unforgettable quote. Great work!

Melissa Taggart
Melissa Taggart(@melissa-taggart)
4 months ago

I am the huge fan of apocalyptic/dystopian/sci-fi stories, and this one didn’t disappoint! There is a beauty in hopelessness here. The last line is brilliant as well. Fantastic work, Carrie!

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Melissa Taggart
Melissa Taggart(@melissa-taggart)
Reply to  Carrie OLeary
4 months ago

Yes, having that choice taken away would be devastating. I love the thought process behind you coming up with this story! ‘Blade Runner’ is something I haven’t watched in full, but I’m curious now. I’ll look into it this weekend. I’m glad your character came to this conclusion, hopefully you expand on this story someday! I found this story to be wonderful!

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
4 months ago

Another great piece of writing, Carrie. When I read the title, I was already amazed up until the end of your story. Well done.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
Reply to  Carrie OLeary
4 months ago

You are welcome, Carrie.

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
4 months ago

Powerful and impressive writing, Carrie! Especially after having watched the video clip, it goes deep.

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