I’m eight when I first spot an electric blue eye peering at me through a hole in the garden fence.

Nine. I’m sat alone at my school desk when the chair beside me scrapes across the carpet. I look up into familiar blue eyes alight with mischief.

We’re thirteen, sitting shoulder to shoulder, getting scolded for skipping school. A side glance shows her bright blues wide with feigned innocence.

Eighteen, dancing close at our prom, those piercing blues send a jolt straight to my heart.

Twenty-two and she stands before me in her white dress, eyes a searing blue flame.

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
8 months ago

A very moving look at little snippets of life, all culminating in a beautiful ending. Nicely done, Emily.

Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
8 months ago

Emily, you are very careful to put someone’s history into a mere hundred or less words.

Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
8 months ago

A lovely romance… but, this time I was all prepared for a twist  ?  Tricked again! Seriously, well written and I loved the progression through the years.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
8 months ago

A love story told through time and the changing colour of her eyes, I loved it, Emily!

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
8 months ago

Hello, Emily. Such a captivating romance story with a beautiful ending and nice progression by changing the color of the eyes. I love it. Well done. 

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
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8 months ago

You are welcome, Emily.

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
8 months ago

This was beautiful, Emily! I love how we were given little glimpses of the stages of their lives. Stunning!

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
8 months ago

You have given us five fascinating verbal photos of a person, Emily, pointing straight at a deepening relationship with the viewer. A great progression and description.

Heather Chrzanowski
Heather Chrzanowski(@heather-chrzanowski)
8 months ago

I love how this story was expertly broken down into snap shots of this couple’s romantic journey. Very unique and piqued my interest right away. The image of the eye peering through the hole in the garden fence was excellent. Great job!

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