Familiar Blues
I’m eight when I first spot an electric blue eye peering at me through a hole in the garden fence.
Nine. I’m sat alone at my school desk when the chair beside me scrapes across the carpet. I look up into familiar blue eyes alight with mischief.
We’re thirteen, sitting shoulder to shoulder, getting scolded for skipping school. A side glance shows her bright blues wide with feigned innocence.
Eighteen, dancing close at our prom, those piercing blues send a jolt straight to my heart.
Twenty-two and she stands before me in her white dress, eyes a searing blue flame.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleA very moving look at little snippets of life, all culminating in a beautiful ending. Nicely done, Emily.
Thank you! Thought I was about due to write something a bit sweeter than my usual ?
Emily, you are very careful to put someone’s history into a mere hundred or less words.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleHaha, it was a task! I was cutting and scrapping a LOT on this one to get it into the word count ?
A lovely romance… but, this time I was all prepared for a twist ? Tricked again! Seriously, well written and I loved the progression through the years.
My pleasure to keep you all on your toes haha ? thank you Sandra, I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleA love story told through time and the changing colour of her eyes, I loved it, Emily!
Thank you Linda, I’m glad you enjoyed it! It definitely tested me, trying to keep it to 100 words ?
Hello, Emily. Such a captivating romance story with a beautiful ending and nice progression by changing the color of the eyes. I love it. Well done.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you so much Lotchie ?
You are welcome, Emily.
This was beautiful, Emily! I love how we were given little glimpses of the stages of their lives. Stunning!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you so much Marianna! So much can be said even in such small snippets!
You have given us five fascinating verbal photos of a person, Emily, pointing straight at a deepening relationship with the viewer. A great progression and description.
I’m glad you enjoyed it, thank you!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI love how this story was expertly broken down into snap shots of this couple’s romantic journey. Very unique and piqued my interest right away. The image of the eye peering through the hole in the garden fence was excellent. Great job!
Thank you Heather! I really enjoyed writing it, though it was so hard keeping it within the hundred words ?