My race is perfect. Perfect. Each individual exhibits godlike traits. Our limbs are powerful and so capable of strong feats. Flawless golden skin covers tall straight bodies and taut muscles. Our long golden hair flies true when we run. Walking, sitting, standing, speaking, nay whatever we do, we show absolute perfection. In assembly, thousands of blue eyes stare at me. Blue eyes indicate intelligence and godlike superiority. 

The spacecraft lands bringing the daughter I have never seen. Strong limbs, golden hair and radiant skin. Removing her face scarf, she penetrates me with brown eyes. Alas, my daughter is not perfect.

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4 months ago

We enjoyed reading this story but were left in a quandary. Does the protagonist accept her daughter because she is her daughter, or spurn her because she isn’t society’s version of perfect? Hopefully the first!

Allan Neil
Allan Neil(@allan-neil)
5 months ago

A conundrum, Margarida. Maybe the difference would bring her fortune, or maybe condemn her as a pariah. Your story got me wondering about your ‘tribe’ (or race). Fascinating.

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Emily O'Leary
Emily O'Leary(@emily-oleary)
5 months ago

A very interesting story, Margarida — I hope the daughters difference makes no impact on her parents affections! Would love to see more of this story!

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
5 months ago

I found your story quite chilling, Margarida, with echoes of the past. It raised many questions. How many other brown-eyed babies had arrived and been labelled imperfect? What future would this baby have? You certainly got me thinking and wanting to learn more.

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
5 months ago

This reminds me of The Midwich Cuckoo’s/ Village of the Damned. Well done

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
Reply to  Margarida Brei
5 months ago

I really must read the book sometime. The TV series and film adaptations were truly creepy!

Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
Reply to  Carrie OLeary
4 months ago

I can recommend the books, Carrie. I read them way back in high school (a ‘couple’ of years ago!) Brilliant. But, I haven’t seen the TV series or films so I must look out for them 🙂

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Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
4 months ago

To me this is a great example of showing, not telling, Margarida. I really wanted the father to get a reality check and I hope now he has I hope he becomes a more tolerant person. Well done!

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
4 months ago

Margarida, your story is intriguing. I am now wondering what will be future of that child in your story. If her imperfection was accepted heartily and if she received more affection from her family; and if she lived happily or not? Well done.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
Reply to  Margarida Brei
4 months ago

You’re welcome. Yes, it is true, Margarida.

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