Elsa’s bedroom was the ‘room-in-the-roof’. One clear night, shortly after she had gone to bed, she sat bolt upright.

The moon had turned blue.

She rushed downstairs. ‘Mummy, there’s a big blue eye in the sky! Come and see!’

I followed her upstairs. Sure enough, the moon had turned the colour of a summer sky.

‘Elsa. You must close your eyes and make a wish without telling me.’

She covered her eyes for five seconds. ‘Done it.’

She looked so serene.

How do you tell a five-year-old there’s been an eruption in Iceland and the dust had made that illusion?

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 month ago

I know there is a serious note to the story at the end, but it’s a really sweet tale and I’m so glad Mum kept the truth to herself. Nicely done 🙂

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 month ago

The moon must have seemed magical to little Elsa that night, Allan. I loved how her mum got her to make a wish keeping the magic alive. A lovely story.

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Emily O'Leary
Emily O'Leary(@emily-oleary)
1 month ago

As a mother to a five year old, I can definitely empathise with this mother and her wishes to save her child’s innocence that little bit longer! A very touching story, Allan!

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Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
1 month ago

Allan, you moved me dramatically through so many emotions. Loved your provocative and unexpected ending.

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
1 month ago

Allan, I enjoyed this story so much! I love Elsa’s excitement when she told her Mom to come and look. It reminded me of our little one who always tells me to close my eyes and then leads me through the house to show me some ‘surprise’ like a room she cleaned or something she made 🙂 I am also very happy that Mom turned it into a magical moment, rather than telling Elsa the truth. Lovely story.

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Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
1 month ago

How do you tell her? You don’t; you do exactly as this loving mother did. A beautiful story, Allen, heartwarming from the first sentence to the last. Well done 🙂

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago

Hello, Allan. You make me smile in your end note. The innocent reaction of the child is so cute and sweet. Thanks to her mother for keeping the truth to keep her child’s magical moment. Nicely done.

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 month ago

A very well told story, Allan. I agree with what other readers say about the mother’s reaction. I guess you see such clever, fast-thinking parents only once in a blue moon?

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Susan Dawson
Susan Dawson(@susan-dawson)
24 days ago

Plus, a great starter for the other story competition of ‘Secret wish’

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