Skylight
Elsa’s bedroom was the ‘room-in-the-roof’. One clear night, shortly after she had gone to bed, she sat bolt upright.
The moon had turned blue.
She rushed downstairs. ‘Mummy, there’s a big blue eye in the sky! Come and see!’
I followed her upstairs. Sure enough, the moon had turned the colour of a summer sky.
‘Elsa. You must close your eyes and make a wish without telling me.’
She covered her eyes for five seconds. ‘Done it.’
She looked so serene.
How do you tell a five-year-old there’s been an eruption in Iceland and the dust had made that illusion?
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI know there is a serious note to the story at the end, but it’s a really sweet tale and I’m so glad Mum kept the truth to herself. Nicely done 🙂
Thank you Carrie. For someone as naturally loquacious as I am, getting it out in 100 words was an achievement, but it gave me a good feeling.
The moon must have seemed magical to little Elsa that night, Allan. I loved how her mum got her to make a wish keeping the magic alive. A lovely story.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you Linda. I feel quite good about the story, which came from nowhere.
As a mother to a five year old, I can definitely empathise with this mother and her wishes to save her child’s innocence that little bit longer! A very touching story, Allan!
Thank you Emily. This story was a new world for me.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleAllan, you moved me dramatically through so many emotions. Loved your provocative and unexpected ending.
Thank you Margarida. The 100 word format was quite alien to me and I’m happy the story was appreciated.
Allan, I enjoyed this story so much! I love Elsa’s excitement when she told her Mom to come and look. It reminded me of our little one who always tells me to close my eyes and then leads me through the house to show me some ‘surprise’ like a room she cleaned or something she made 🙂 I am also very happy that Mom turned it into a magical moment, rather than… Read more »
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleHow do you tell her? You don’t; you do exactly as this loving mother did. A beautiful story, Allen, heartwarming from the first sentence to the last. Well done 🙂
Hello, Allan. You make me smile in your end note. The innocent reaction of the child is so cute and sweet. Thanks to her mother for keeping the truth to keep her child’s magical moment. Nicely done.
A very well told story, Allan. I agree with what other readers say about the mother’s reaction. I guess you see such clever, fast-thinking parents only once in a blue moon?
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleMarianna, Sandra, Lotchie and Christer. I apologise for the delay in responding to your very positive and welcome comments. I’ve had a very busy 5 days or so. I do appreciate your reviews. Allan
Plus, a great starter for the other story competition of ‘Secret wish’
Now that’s a thought. Thank you Susan.
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