A welcome summer breeze cooled the evening air as we relaxed on the back porch.

“Have I ever told you that your eyes are as blue as the Pacific Ocean?”

“Many times, my love.”

“They beguile me tonight just as they did the night we met.”

How often had he spoken those words?  The words he would leave behind.  Tomorrow a new assignment would take him from me… and only his words remain.

His arm slid around me, pulling me closer.  I forced a smile, suppressing the tears that would come later.  Flowing… like waves on the blue Pacific.

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Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
1 month ago

Thank you, Linda for your bitter sweet short story. Your last line of comparing tears to “waves on the Blue Pacific” resonants with poetry. Powerful!

Emily O'Leary
Emily O'Leary(@emily-oleary)
1 month ago

Such a touching story in such few words Linda. Beautiful!

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago

I was emotional by your story, Linda. And your comparison of the blue eyes to pacific ocean and tears to waves in the pacific ocean was so deep. You did it well in just 100 words. Very nicely done.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago
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You’re welcome, Linda.

Allan Neil
Allan Neil(@allan-neil)
30 days ago

Wistful, sad and gentle, like the love you can touch, but not hold on to. Sweetness that doesn’t turn bitter. Your descriptive talent is remarkable. I could almost taste the salt in her tears, or was it the ocean?

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
23 days ago

Not sure how I missed this story before, Linda. Definitely a tear-jerker, written with such sensitivity. Nicely done.

Heather C
Heather C(@heather-c)
20 days ago

These 100 words left me wanting more! I wondered about this man and what his job was and what was going to happen to him…possibly the base for a longer story here! I liked your opening line. It really set the scene and atmosphere! Nice work Linda!

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Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
17 days ago

Linda, this is a beautiful, bittersweet story and it left me wondering whether they would meet again? This was well written.

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