Yesterday, beautiful blue-eyed sky!

Today, an autistic sky burns. Putrid. Vile. Threatening.

Yesterday, all was perfect. A comforting sun smiled. Sauntering hand in hand, we brimmed with love. All was so right. We were longing for marriage, a cottage and a bright future.

Today, the very atmosphere is cracked. Suddenly, the heavens spit fiery rocks. The waters boil and roil. Knots form in the land, which demonically form gaping maws of fissures. Frantically, I scream your name. Where are you? Where are you?

“Cut! Great film shot!” the Director bellows. 

 As the lead actor, I walk off the film set. 

 

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 month ago

A wonderfully descriptive story, Margarida, with a great twist at the end! Love the expression ‘Blue-eyed sky’. And this definitely has all the ingredients of a terrific disaster movie!

Emily O'Leary
Emily O'Leary(@emily-oleary)
1 month ago
Reply to  Linda Rock

It’s definitely a movie I would watch!

I agree with Linda, this was such a descriptive piece Margarida, I truly felt I was right there!

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Thompson Emate
Thompson Emate(@thompson-emate)
1 month ago

This story is indeed engaging. I love the flow and twist. Good write.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago

Hello, Margarida. It is very captivating. And I didn’t see the twist in the end coming. Very well done.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago
Reply to  Margarida Brei

You’re welcome, Margarida.

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Allan Neil
Allan Neil(@allan-neil)
1 month ago

Heaven to Hell then a big ‘Phew’. You’ve squeezed so much into 100 wprds. Gripping stuff!

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