In the evening light, she sat next to a fountain. He was taking a stroll. He sat beside her to have a view of the closing hours trudge.

“It’s a relaxing scene. Isn’t it?” he asked.
“If you say so,” she replied.
“I thought you’re seated here to enjoy the view?”

She turned to look at him. There was something behind her blue pigment-lined eyes. Something far deeper than words.
A car drove and stood by. She turned to look at him. She boarded the vehicle. It sped off.

He still sees her.
In his mind and his dreams.

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
4 months ago

What a lovely, romantic story, Thompson. I loved the line ‘Something far deeper than words.’ And those last two lines were beautiful, leaving me with the belief that these two will surely meet again. Very nicely done.

Emily O'Leary
Emily O'Leary(@emily-oleary)
4 months ago

This piece instantly made me think of the phrase, “the eyes are the window to the soul” — that unforgettable connection your protagonist felt. I wonder if they’ll meet again!

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
4 months ago

Wow! Thompson. I guess the lady in red is having a problem that brings her to that place. They destined to meet in that situation. I could feel their intimate connection in such a few words, Thompson. Such a good romance. I wish that they meet again, by chance or by destiny. Who knows? Well done. 

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
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4 months ago

You’re welcome, Thompson.

Allan Neil
Allan Neil(@allan-neil)
4 months ago

A brief encounter, with inexplicable magic you never forget. I’ve had that happen!! Nicely done.

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Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
4 months ago

Clever writing about a mysterious lady in red. Really thought your last two lines were soulfully moving.

Heather Chrzanowski
Heather Chrzanowski(@heather-chrzanowski)
4 months ago

This story was very intriguing. I think that we have all had a moment in life in which we have met someone, briefly, and never forgotten them. You did an excellent job conveying this very vivid and poignant moment for your main character. This piece of writing made me want to know even more about these characters…especially the mysterious woman. Great work!

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