Swedish Saga: 3. The Morning When Things Turned Around
Early in the morning, Fatima left her house, certain that her bearded guest would stay in bed. Her first set of tools had been wine, lovemaking and a rope.
She returned with some sharper tools.Two thoughts made her smile: the Viking’s slow and painful death, and the hope for a blue-eyed, fatherless son.
The door was ajar. Pieces of rope on the floor. An empty bed.
Fatima ran outside. She could see a small boat heading for the longships waiting in the bay. Two people were visible. One with a beard. The other one was wearing her friend Yamina’s dress.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleWe enjoyed the progression of your saga. In this case the whole is greater than the sum of its parts. This one, our opinion, is able to stand alone. You should consider writing another “series combination” with 350 words in another contest! Well done!
Oh, yes the intrigue deepens! Christer, you are making great use of laconicism in this plot twister.
Laconism is, as you know, needed in this mini-format, Margarida. Thanks for reading and commenting. I’m glad you liked it.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleReally, Christer? What a nice twist. I was expecting the death of Viking in this part 3. But! Wow! I was surprised. I was deeply intrigued by what will happen next. My excitement was now intense. Very well done.
We all were expecting gruesome things to happen, weren’t we, Lotchie? Well, instead of blood and cruel torture, faithlessness and quislingism entered the stage. I’m glad I managed to surprise both you and Fatima.
I can’t wait to read for the next part, Christer.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleSplendid! You turned the tables on all of us! I love this third story. Fatima sounds even more murderous than her erstwhile lover! I’m glad we were spared the blood and gore. Now I wonder what will happen? Will a blue-eyed baby be born? Will the new lovers find happiness? Tune in next week! I do love cliff hangers.
It makes me very happy to see that the story agreed with you, Fuji. Again, I was certain that this was the end of it and didn’t understand that it ended with a cliff hanger. I’m glad you discovered it. So, after reading your comment, I started to wonder what might happen next. As you say, tune in later on.
Her hopes for a blue-eyed, fatherless child may just come true! I wonder how she’ll feel about that now that the decision was taken away from her!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleAfter the third part was shortlisted, I also started wondering what happened after the Viking and Yamina disappeared together. Therefore, I made some more investigation into the matter, and it turns out that you are right! Fatima’s hopes did come true. You might be able to read about it in a bit.
Wow! I’ve been away from the site for a while and just checked back in to catch up on all of the amazing writing. So glad I read this. Christer, you never fail to impress.
It’s very nice to have you back, Heather. (I went back to check out your stories and loved them all, especially The Gossamer Curtain and A Higher Law. Excellent writing!)
Thank you very much for your kind words. I hope you’ll be able to read the 4th and last part too.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleAwww, thanks! Sometimes when I read my old stories I think, “That’s awful. I’m a terrible writer!” And then other times I think, “Eh, I’m not so bad!” LOL, hindsight is a whole other perspective! I will definitely be here to read the 4th and last part of your incredible tale!
That’s brilliant, Christer! I love it. Well done!
Thanks a lot, Sandra. I’m excited that you like this one too. I actually wrote a fourth part too. Let’s see if it shows up later on.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYet another twist! I’m very happy that Fatima couldn’t carry out her plans. I’m looking forward to part 4.