Bang!

Entrapped!

Thump and weak echo, my heart sounds. Sickening dread runs amok in my veins. Bilge water swishes in my stomach.

What happened?

My overwrought mind recalls joyous voices and colourful gauze costumes. Stately in my glass coach drawn by butterflies, I was touring my kingdom.

My subjects cried, “Blessings on our Fairy Queen.”

Abruptly, the fairies’ golden laughter was rent apart by screams. In a ragged pouch, I was kidnapped.

Now, trapped inside a filthy lantern.

Rubbing away the soot, I freeze on sighting a giant blue eye of icy malice. My captor is the Blue-Eyed Cyclopes’ King.      

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Emily O'Leary
Emily O'Leary(@emily-oleary)
29 days ago

Poor fairy! I hope the Cyclops King doesn’t have anything too awful in mind!

Lovely writing, I adored the idea of the glass coach drawn by butterflies — beautiful!

Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
27 days ago

Like Emily, I loved the butterfly-drawn coach image. Magic! And, your story. Great progression and I do hope there’s a sequel  🙂 

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
25 days ago

A beautiful magical tale with a great progression. Well done, Margarida.

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
25 days ago

Great imagery in this little fairytale, Margarida, I could quite imagine the little gauzy costumes rippling in the breeze and, like the others, love the idea of a butterfly drawn coach. I do hope that your tiny Fairy Queen can somehow tame the Cyclops King from within her lantern prison. I could quite imagine this story in a children’s picture book. Something to think about if you wanted to expand on it a bit. Nicely done 😃

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Allan Neil
Allan Neil(@allan-neil)
24 days ago

Great writing, Margarida. A story that starts with almost sickening dread. Dread that intensifies to that confrontation between the author and the monster. The picture painting is excellent too. Excellent material for a children’s’ book, if you want to scare them to death!!!

Heather C
Heather C(@heather-c)
21 days ago

This story really excited me. The capture of a Fairy Queen! Delightful! (Well, not for her. 😔) Hope there is a sequel. I loved the phrase, “Giant blue eyes of icy malice.” You obviously have great talent. Looking forward to reading more of your work!

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Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
10 days ago

This is a great story, Margarida. It certainly left me wondering what would happen to the fairy queen now. I’m hoping that she will come up with a clever plan to escape!

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