Snared
Bang!
Entrapped!
Thump and weak echo, my heart sounds. Sickening dread runs amok in my veins. Bilge water swishes in my stomach.
What happened?
My overwrought mind recalls joyous voices and colourful gauze costumes. Stately in my glass coach drawn by butterflies, I was touring my kingdom.
My subjects cried, “Blessings on our Fairy Queen.”
Abruptly, the fairies’ golden laughter was rent apart by screams. In a ragged pouch, I was kidnapped.
Now, trapped inside a filthy lantern.
Rubbing away the soot, I freeze on sighting a giant blue eye of icy malice. My captor is the Blue-Eyed Cyclopes’ King.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GooglePoor fairy! I hope the Cyclops King doesn’t have anything too awful in mind!
Lovely writing, I adored the idea of the glass coach drawn by butterflies — beautiful!
This drabble rings with tones or themes of Beauty and the Beast, Beauty and King Kong.
Thank you, Emily for appreciating the image of a butterfly drawn coach!
Like Emily, I loved the butterfly-drawn coach image. Magic! And, your story. Great progression and I do hope there’s a sequel ?
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you, Sandra for your sweet comments. I try to leave the reader wanting to hear more!
A beautiful magical tale with a great progression. Well done, Margarida.
Thank you as always for your kind supportive words, Lotchie.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleGreat imagery in this little fairytale, Margarida, I could quite imagine the little gauzy costumes rippling in the breeze and, like the others, love the idea of a butterfly drawn coach. I do hope that your tiny Fairy Queen can somehow tame the Cyclops King from within her lantern prison. I could quite imagine this story in a children’s picture book. Something to think about if you wanted to expand on it… Read more »
I imagine the Fairy Queen is quite gutsy in reality so anything could happen. Oh yes, a children’s book sounds fun! Thank you, Carrie for your supportive comments.
Voice Club, would you be so kind to change the last two words to – Cyclopes’ King.
Thank you!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleGreat writing, Margarida. A story that starts with almost sickening dread. Dread that intensifies to that confrontation between the author and the monster. The picture painting is excellent too. Excellent material for a children’s’ book, if you want to scare them to death!!!
Thank you, Allan for your kind words. Painting an intensified picture in the reader’s mind was crucial to this drabble. Would love to write a children’s book, thanks for the encouragement!
This story really excited me. The capture of a Fairy Queen! Delightful! (Well, not for her. ?) Hope there is a sequel. I loved the phrase, “Giant blue eyes of icy malice.” You obviously have great talent. Looking forward to reading more of your work!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThanks, Heather for your encouragement. Yes, I wrote Part 2 after reading so many motivating comments.
This is a great story, Margarida. It certainly left me wondering what would happen to the fairy queen now. I’m hoping that she will come up with a clever plan to escape!
The Fairy Queen obviously thinks she is in a precarious situation after being kidnapped and her ill treatment. However, I see her as brave and smart compared to a Cyclops. If this prompt had not closed, I had so many ideas for other like stories.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you, Marianna for your kind comments.