
Retribution
She climbed through the open window. Stiletto already in hand, she crept silently towards his bed. She glanced at the bedside table, illuminated by a single candle, and the empty glass. She’d managed to slip a sleeping draught into his drink, the same as the one he used when he wanted her pliable.
She turned her eyes to the man on the bed; the rise and fall of his chest. The night balmy, he had pushed the satin sheet down to his waist, making her task easier.
Goddess, she hated him. Had done ever since he’d forced her down the aisle three years previously, threatening the lives of her parents, king and queen of the neighbouring country, if she didn’t comply. How she’d wished he would die, though she’d never admitted as much to anyone.
She stepped closer to his bed—anxious, afraid, palms slick with sweat. Could she really go through with this?
But she was a queen; not so meek and mild as her vile husband, who’d already murdered to secure this kingdom, believed. Her father had seen to that as she grew to womanhood. She couldn’t allow this tyrannical brute to rule over her people and lands.
Before she lost her nerve, she clamped one hand over his mouth, simultaneously plunging her stiletto up and under his ribs. She was slightly off mark, feeling the scrape of blade against bone judder in her wrist before entering his heart.
His eyes flew open, confusion and pain apparent in their icy depths. She saw the question there.
“I will never let you have my kingdom,” she spat, “I care not for myself, but I cannot allow you to destroy the will of my people.”
She watched the light in his eyes dull before slipping back out of the window and making the descent to her rooms.
No-one would suspect her, the lowly, humble queen; especially as she was five months gone with child and had rooms two floors below which she had, apparently, not left this night.
It was over and, for the first time in years, she smiled.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleA revenge story told in chilling detail. Some wishes aren’t all sweetness and light!

Oh, I do enjoy a ‘revenge’ story, Carrie, and who can blame the Queen for taking hers? Wonderfully descriptive, as always, and a great read. Loved this one!
Thank you, Linda. It was inspired by my story ‘A Date With Destiny’ (https://voice.club/story/fiction/38342/2022-micro-03-a-date-with-destiny) in the last micro fiction ‘blue eyes’ competition. I’m considering combining the two and extending them into a short story. I’m starting to think that my plans for ‘Coffee O’Clock’ are going slightly awry. I’m finding that I want to tell far more about the characters than I can in a flash fiction story ?
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThe assassination of an usurper, a well built alibi and a deed done for the good of many. I absolutely loved it!
What will she tell to her child? That’s the question!
Thank you so much, Greene. I’d been in a major slump for a few weeks, and had just been talking to a friend about it, went to bed and it literally hit me between the eyes. I’d been intending to write a story about Linnie from one of my other 100 word stories, but then this one just came to me and I had to get out of bed to write it!… Read more »
My book was about a father who made his girl pass as a boy and so… It can be done!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI’d have to really think that one out, Greene. As the child hasn’t yet been born, she would have to go somewhere and have the child under a secret identity, then, of course the others in the kingdom may want proof. Also, as queen, it is unlikely she would always be able to care for the child herself, so it would be impossible to keep it secret from everyone. Your comment has… Read more »
Carrie, I was so immersed in your action story that I was holding my breath. Your story has all the great qualities of a murder- suspense, intrigue, revenge, solid alibi, fast pace! Well done!
Thank you so much, Margarida. I loved writing this one, it almost wrote itself and I desperately want to expand on it now. I just feel that there could be so much more of the story to tell. I’m so glad you enjoyed it.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI’m with Linda, a good revenge story is very satisfying when justice is served to such an evil character. I felt my hand moving up and down with hers, plunging that stiletto in. Perhaps I’m not as meek and mild as I appear, too ? Well done, Carrie, a great story.
Tbank you so much, Sandra. I’m so glad that you felt strongly enough to go through the motions with my poor protagonist. I’m sure she’d love the support as much as I do ?
Action-packed, assassination, drama, revenge, justice served, who could possibly ask for more in a story? A true joy to read your writing, Carrie!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you so much, Bella. That’s very kind of you. I’m so glad you enjoyed the story 🙂
Oh! I love your breathtaking action story about revenge. There’s no greater revenge than getting the maximum justice. Well done, Carrie.
Thank you, Lotchie. Yes, my queen certainly wanted to make sure her cruel husband couldn’t hurt anyone else. Glad you liked it 🙂
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYou are most welcome, Carrie.
Carrie, your story has such a build-up of suspense, I actually held my breath, waiting to see if she went through with it or if he woke up and caught her in his room. This was very well-written. I hope that you will expand on it.
Thank you Marianna, I’m so glad that enjoyed this story because it gave me great satisfaction to write it. I think my closet serial killer must have been coming out ?. I’d really love to expand on it, but I get so worried that I won’t be able to do the story justice that I chicken out ?. So, we shall see!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleExcellent, Carrie. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. It is very much appreciated.