When I met Duncan Fraser, I knew I would do anything he asked, even if it was wrong…even if it was reprehensible.

His presence left me dazed and dim, like an opioid addict bobbing in and out of a fuzzy, murky consciousness. Even the sound of his voice dulled my will. At Duncan’s hand, I was a witless marionette hating yet craving the masterful pull of his strings.

Preceding a sickening swoon, I recall a pair of blue eyes, glacial and raw as he pulled his face away from my neck, pointy alabaster fangs dripping with blood.


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    Margarida Brei
    Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
    1 year ago

    Heather, you have written a powerful chilling micro fiction. Particularly enjoyed your strong
    imagery in ‘like an opioid addict.” You painted Duncan Fraser so spooky!

    Carrie OLeary
    Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
    1 year ago

    A very gripping tale, Heather. You’ve portrayed well the power that your vampire has over his victims. Looking at your accompanying picture, I wouldn’t fancy meeting him down a dark alley. Good job!

    Emily O'Leary
    Emily O'Leary(@emily-oleary)
    1 year ago

    Oh I love it Heather! I loved that second paragraph, I can absolutely imagine your MC just vacantly going about doing exactly what Duncan has ordered!

    Linda Rock
    Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
    1 year ago

    I can imagine a woman feeling like that about a man, Heather, luckily most of them don’t bite! What an amazing choice and use of 100 words you have given us, I am blown away!

    Lotchie Carmelo
    Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
    1 year ago

    Hello, Heather. I definitely love this spooky tale in the theme “Blue Eyes” – so scary. Well done.

    Lotchie Carmelo
    Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
    Reply to  Heather Chrzanowski
    1 year ago

    You’re welcome, Heather. You can do it. You’re writing skills are already good. Keep writing.

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