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If my mother had lived, I would not be princess of sorrow.
If my father had not remarried, I would not be stepdaughter of despair.
If my father had not died, I would not be child of angst.
If my step-sisters had not been so cruel, I would not be waif of drudgery.
If my fairy-god mother had not wished me to the ball, I would not be the pawn of midnight.
I fear midnight! Midnight will crumble my gorgeous gown to rags, quash my coach to pumpkin purée, and obliterate me to a mangy servant despised by Prince Charming.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYes, a nice retell or should I say the remake of Cinderella.
Most versions of Cinderella are sterile and sugary sweet, so I wrote the other turn of the screw version.The protagonist is both miserable and cynical.
I think this is very clever. The repetition really works well for this short format and, as usual, your descriptive language is beautifully constructed.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you for your kind feedback, Preston.
Nothing ‘Disney’ about this Cinderella, Margarida! As Preston comments, this is very cleverly done and, in my opinion, a much more realistic take on the story. Good job!
Linda, you are too kind. This is definitely not the Disney or film version of Cinderella. She is rather morbid.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleMargarida, this is a creative way of retelling the Cinderella story! One tends to only focus on the fleeting glamorous evening; and then the happily ever after. I, for one, mostly ignored the majority of the doom and despair that initially brought her to that point.
Well, Cinderella is a fairy tale, but looking underneath that “fleeting glamorous evening” is quite eye opening.
Cleverly written, Margarida. A beautiful retelling of Cinderella. Well done.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you for your kind comments, Lotchie. It is very telling to look at an event or story from a different perspective.
You are most welcome, Margarida.
I love this alternate version, Margarida, especially the repetition but I want to tell her to stop complaining and be thankful she’s had a lucky escape. Being a Royal would just be another kind of prison with no freedom. Let the step-sisters have the prince and they can move to the palace with their evil mother and she can live in peace in the cottage. Well done!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleOoooh, maybe I should write part 2 of unhappily ever after in a royal palace. Thank you for
your feedback Sandra. My protagonist is such a whiner!
I bet we could meld our two versions of Cinderella into a very dreary tale indeed, Margarida!
Yes, Zombie Cinderella meets whiny cynical Cinderella. No Disney contents here!
Thanks, Emily for reading my drabble.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI love Cinderella’s clever way of finding something to complain about no matter what. “Where is the perfection that I deserve”?
Cinders definitely is a whiner, but in a way rightly so in her downward spiral from princess to lowly servant.