If my mother had lived, I would not be princess of sorrow. 

If my father had not remarried, I would not be stepdaughter of despair.

If my father had not died, I would not be child of angst.

If my step-sisters had not been so cruel, I would not be waif of drudgery.

If my fairy-god mother had not wished me to the ball, I would not be the pawn of midnight.

I fear midnight! Midnight will crumble my gorgeous gown to rags, quash my coach to pumpkin purée, and obliterate me to a mangy servant despised by Prince Charming.

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Thompson Emate
Thompson Emate(@thompson-emate)
7 months ago

Yes, a nice retell or should I say the remake of Cinderella.

Preston Randall
Preston Randall(@preston-randall)
7 months ago

I think this is very clever. The repetition really works well for this short format and, as usual, your descriptive language is beautifully constructed.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
7 months ago

Nothing ‘Disney’ about this Cinderella, Margarida! As Preston comments, this is very cleverly done and, in my opinion, a much more realistic take on the story. Good job!

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
7 months ago

Margarida, this is a creative way of retelling the Cinderella story! One tends to only focus on the fleeting glamorous evening; and then the happily ever after. I, for one, mostly ignored the majority of the doom and despair that initially brought her to that point.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
7 months ago

Cleverly written, Margarida. A beautiful retelling of Cinderella. Well done. 

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
Reply to  Margarida Brei
7 months ago

You are most welcome, Margarida.

Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
7 months ago

I love this alternate version, Margarida, especially the repetition but I want to tell her to stop complaining and be thankful she’s had a lucky escape. Being a Royal would just be another kind of prison with no freedom. Let the step-sisters have the prince and they can move to the palace with their evil mother and she can live in peace in the cottage. Well done!

Emily O'Leary
Emily O'Leary(@emily-oleary)
7 months ago

I bet we could meld our two versions of Cinderella into a very dreary tale indeed, Margarida!

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
7 months ago

I love Cinderella’s clever way of finding something to complain about no matter what. “Where is the perfection that I deserve”?

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