A Grave Mistake
“Samhain approaches,” said Wizard Rissole, “We must help the villagers praise the dead. I’ll leave the ceremony to you, Whizzbang.”
As usual, his apprentice Whizzbang wasn’t paying attention. He read the texts. Was this really what Rissole meant?
At midnight on Samhain, Whizzbang muttered incantations before the fire.
Moans, groans and shuffling feet disturbed the night. The pungent odour of decay pervaded the air as the long-dead population of the village stumbled from their graves, biting at the living.
Rissole fought through the crowd. “Whizzbang, you dolt! You were supposed to help the villagers praise the dead, not raise them!”
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleFor anyone interested, Whizzbang has been a protagonist in some of my previous stories. These are the links:
https://voice.club/story/fiction/18082/2021-flash-02-whizzbang-whoopsie
https://voice.club/story/fiction/20700/2021-micro-02-gift-for-a-witch
https://voice.club/story/fiction/23429/2021-micro-04-witchy-resolutions
Now that’s not going to look great on Whizzbang’s resume! If only people would read more carefully, we wouldn’t have to clean up messes like this. A very entertaining story, Carrie.
Thank you, Preston. In this case, I believe Whizzbang didn’t listen carefully enough, thinking his Master said to ‘raise’. The doubt started as he began his reading! He doesn’t improve with age!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleWhizzbang – love the name- caused so much trouble by not following the instructions properly. How funny!
Thank you, Margarida. Whizzbang gained his name by becoming a little over-excited by the fireworks at his naming ceremony. He’d intended choosing the name Nocturne, which he thought would have been far more dignified. Things just never went quite right!
A comedic version of Michael Jackson’s ‘Thriller’! Nothing ever seems to go right for Whizzbang does it? That’s why he’s so loveable! Great story, Carrie.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThanks Linda. Writing about Whizzbang always make me think of Bobby’s description of Phyllis right at the beginning of The Railway Children. Whizzbang means well too, it’s just that all his best intentions go epically wrong!
Poor Whizzbang, in all fairness, he did question whether it was really what Rissole meant. At least he intended to do it right this time! ?
Thanks, Marianna. If only Whizzbang had confessed to Rissole that he hadn’t been listening properly, all this could have been avoided. But, where’s the fun in that?! ?
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleSpooky and funny. I indeed sympathise with the villagers. It was just a wrongly comprehended deed.
Thank you, Thompson. I’m glad you found the story funny. Poor Whizzbang often gets things a bit muddled.
Wonderful, Carrie! The perfect title – it doesn’t really give anything away and yet after reading the story it fits perfectly. Great images drew me into the story and I loved your photo. Well done.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you, Sandra. I’m glad you enjoyed the title and accompanying picture as well as the story. It took me a lot of browsing to find the perfect picture and I love the different text options in Bazaart for doing the title on this one!
You created a very lovely and entertaining story but very spooky. Sandra is right. Your title is perfect, and I love the photo. Very well done, Carrie.
Thank you, Lotchie. I’m so glad that you enjoyed the whole package too 🙂
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYou are most welcome, Carrie.
I always enjoy Whizzbang’s mishaps ? he’s such a fun character! You always manage to inject such fun twists and humour even in such a small amount of words, very well done!
Thank you so much, Emily. It’s nice having the opportunity to bring him out for a dust off every now and again. Must bring Mab out soon or she might start getting a little jealous ?
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleImagine what a difference a little p makes, Carrie! I like your idea!
? I guess it depends on what that little p stands for. Some of my old urology patients would definitely agree! Thanks for your comment. Another much needed smile!
You can’t have too many smiles. Maybe too much p, though. At least at midnight. I think your urology patients would agree with that.
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Well done, Carrie. You have a gift for horror. ?
Thank you, that means a lot coming from you. It’s such a fun genre to write; it encourages a bit of creativity!
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