Midnight Destiny
Hair dark as midnight, eyes midnight blue, she embodies all the magic and mystery of the witching hour.
When she dances, there’s no escape. Every move designed to possess the very soul of those who watch and yearn.
But it’s she who is possessed… by love.
Not for me, a lovestruck bartender, who would lay down his life for her. But for another who disrespects and mistreats her.
Tonight, I can no longer ignore her cries. Even though I’m no match for him… or the blade that pierces my heart.
And as my life ebbs away… the clock strikes midnight.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleA great story including the tragic theme of unrequited love. Beautifully described in all its pain including the shocking outcome.
Thanks so much, Preston! I really appreciate your comments.
Whew! Just like that. The ending is as sharp as the knife-thrust. Well-paced story, Linda. Very well done!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYour ‘well-paced’ comment means a lot, Allan! It’s something I try hard to achieve. Thanks so much!
Fast paced story in which you have managed to say so much in so few words. Great descriptive story, Linda!
Thank you, Margarida! I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleHello, Linda. It is well created story with a very powerful ending in just a few words. Well done.
Hello, Lotchie. Thank you so much for your kind words which I always appreciate.
You are always welcome, Linda. How are you today?
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI’m fine, Lotchie, I hope you are well too. Extremely hot at the moment in the South of England and we desperately need some rain!
I am fine too. Really? That’s not good, be careful of the heatstroke. And here in Northern Mindanao is always raining. Mostly from 1 pm until night.
Linda, you packed a lot of information into this gripping, well-paced story. Although the ending was shocking, it was also admirable of your protagonist to fight for her love even though he knew it wouldn’t end well. Great job.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThanks so much, Marianna! It is possible to survive a pierce to the heart, so I am optimistic that my brave bartender got the help he needed.
I can only hope that our Lady Midnight notices our brave bartender, and that she escapes her abusive lover!
My hope is that she saves him and they live happily ever after!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI will echo other’s comments here when i say well done, Linda! This was perfectly paced and the ending is very satisfying. I’m rooting for the bartender!
Me too, Melissa! Thank you so much, these comments really give me a lift! And well done on making the final in the ‘Secret Wish’ contest, I really enjoyed your story.
Thank you, Linda!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThis is a short story with a strong theme that’s relatable. Well done, Linda.
Thank you so much, Thompson. I really appreciate your comments.