Smashed to Smithereens
As the midnight chimes faded, two aging sisters, primped and preened in frills and feathers, staggered out of the palace doorway.
“Give me a hand down these steps,” says one, swaying at the most alarming angle. “I think I overdid it with the champagne.”
“What’s this?” says the other, feeling queasy as she bent down to pick up a tiny glass slipper which was gleaming in the moonlight. “Oops, butterfingers, dropped it now! Never mind, wouldn’t have fitted us anyway.”
The next day a charming prince, finding the shards on the step, cried for a lost love.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThe “Midnight” theme produced an abundance of Cinderella stories; this was our favorite. Tongue in cheek, clever, full of sly humor – a different slant on the age-old fairy tale. The title is delightfully memorable and makes this story stand out among all of the similar Cinderella stories. All you writers, take notice – the best title is one that immediately captures the audience’s attention and later quickly reminds them of the story… Read more »
Thank you ,voice team. The title did take a while to think up
Oh yes, the Cinderella saga continues. The ugly sister probably dropped the glass slipper on purpose being malicious. If the prince was smart, he would find another way to track his true love.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleShame they didn’t have DNA then, as a means to track down the slipper loser!
Wow! Another version of the Cinderella story. I hope the charming prince will be able to find his lost love.
Or maybe not be so fussy about shoe size
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleWell, that’s one way to ruin a happy ending! Although I have to say, picturing the ugly sisters the worse for wear, made them seem more human somehow! Great twist on the tale Susan and a really good read.
Yes, many ball attendees start to be wasted by midnight
Nice twist on a familiar story. Mind you, in every panto I ever saw those Sisty Uglers got their just rewards!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleWow! Nice twist of a new version of Cinderella’s story.
We definitely all tapped into the same brainwave with this prompt, didn’t we ? I think this has been a great exercise on how everyone can write such a different concept for one idea!
I love your take on the ugly sisters, very entertaining. Poor Prince though, I hope he finds another way!
Great minds!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI quite like these sisters, Susan. I find this version of Cinderella miles more interesting and believable than the original. This is a great story!
A fun and witty take on the old tale, Susan. I love the idea for the story and your use of words, especially all the alliterations. However, I had to search the meaning of several of the words. I didn’t know smithereens, primed, preened, or butterfingers (in this context). Thanks for expanding my vocabulary.
Really? Glad you took the time to look them up. Your typo should have read ‘primped’ of course, not primed and certainly not pimped, though anything would be possible with those two!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleWhen I read the last line, I thought, “No, it can’t be!’ I’m a sucker for happy endings, but that being said, this is a fantastic version of the story and I would love to read more. Will the prince find another way to find his true love? I must say, the sisters and their excessive swaying on the steps made me smile. Great story, Susan!