As the midnight chimes faded, two aging sisters, primped and preened in frills and feathers, staggered out of the palace doorway.

“Give me a hand down these steps,” says one, swaying at the most alarming angle. “I think I overdid it with the champagne.”

“What’s this?” says the other, feeling queasy as she bent down to pick up a tiny glass slipper which was gleaming in the moonlight. “Oops, butterfingers, dropped it now! Never mind, wouldn’t have fitted us anyway.”

The next day a charming prince, finding the shards on the step, cried for a lost love.

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    1 year ago

    The “Midnight” theme produced an abundance of Cinderella stories; this was our favorite. Tongue in cheek, clever, full of sly humor – a different slant on the age-old fairy tale. The title is delightfully memorable and makes this story stand out among all of the similar Cinderella stories. All you writers, take notice – the best title is one that immediately captures the audience’s attention and later quickly reminds them of the story… Read more »

    Margarida Brei
    Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
    1 year ago

    Oh yes, the Cinderella saga continues. The ugly sister probably dropped the glass slipper on purpose being malicious. If the prince was smart, he would find another way to track his true love.

    Allan Neil
    Allan Neil(@allan-neil)
    Reply to  Margarida Brei
    1 year ago

    Shame they didn’t have DNA then, as a means to track down the slipper loser!

    Thompson Emate
    Thompson Emate(@thompson-emate)
    1 year ago

    Wow! Another version of the Cinderella story. I hope the charming prince will be able to find his lost love.

    Linda Rock
    Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
    1 year ago

    Well, that’s one way to ruin a happy ending! Although I have to say, picturing the ugly sisters the worse for wear, made them seem more human somehow! Great twist on the tale Susan and a really good read.

    Allan Neil
    Allan Neil(@allan-neil)
    1 year ago

    Nice twist on a familiar story. Mind you, in every panto I ever saw those Sisty Uglers got their just rewards!

    Lotchie Carmelo
    Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
    1 year ago

    Wow! Nice twist of a new version of Cinderella’s story. 

    Emily O'Leary
    Emily O'Leary(@emily-oleary)
    1 year ago

    We definitely all tapped into the same brainwave with this prompt, didn’t we ? I think this has been a great exercise on how everyone can write such a different concept for one idea!

    I love your take on the ugly sisters, very entertaining. Poor Prince though, I hope he finds another way!

    Melissa Taggart
    Melissa Taggart(@melissa-taggart)
    1 year ago

    I quite like these sisters, Susan. I find this version of Cinderella miles more interesting and believable than the original. This is a great story!

    Christer Norrlof
    Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
    1 year ago

    A fun and witty take on the old tale, Susan. I love the idea for the story and your use of words, especially all the alliterations. However, I had to search the meaning of several of the words. I didn’t know smithereens, primed, preened, or butterfingers (in this context). Thanks for expanding my vocabulary.

    Marianna Pieterse
    Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
    1 year ago

    When I read the last line, I thought, “No, it can’t be!’ I’m a sucker for happy endings, but that being said, this is a fantastic version of the story and I would love to read more. Will the prince find another way to find his true love? I must say, the sisters and their excessive swaying on the steps made me smile. Great story, Susan!

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