“Oh! Not again,” he cried as it fell and shattered.
This was the third time it was falling. He had replaced the gadget two other times and it had cost him a fortune.

He had had a turbulent sail and a tumultuous ride. He wished he could be cloaked in the darkest of nights. He wished the midnight train would come for him and convey him to a distant destination away from the world’s troubles.

He sat sprawling on the floor. His phone rang.
“Oh! Mum, I’m fed up with everything.”
“Please my love, don’t. I’ll be with you shortly.”

 

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Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
1 month ago

Thank goodness for Mums! Mine generally phone me when they are in a pickle.

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
1 month ago

I love the ending, Thompson! The beautiful relationship your protagonist and his mom was portrayed so well. This is another great story!

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago

Wow. The tender, loving care of a mother is well portrayed, Thompson. 

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
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1 month ago

 😉  Nicely done, Thompson.

Melissa Taggart
Melissa Taggart(@melissa-taggart)
1 month ago

Great work, Thompson. I really loved the imagery of the midnight train coming to take him away from the world’s troubles. This is a story rich in description with so few words!

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 month ago

I see we’ve both used the Midnight train as a form of escape in our stories, Thompson! I too loved those last lines in yours, great dialogue, really realistic! Well done!

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