“Some see me here, some over there. Some see me everywhere.” The gaunt-faced man perched on the rooftop watching his quarry staggering down the street.

He dropped silently to a balcony. “Some see me not at all,” he whispered, leaping onto the man’s shoulders, “Because I like to make ’em fall.” He picked the man’s pockets, leapt back up to the balcony and sprung from rooftop to rooftop.

The bells of St Mary’s, Whitechapel chimed midnight. He paused and sniffed an iron-tinged scent in the air.

“Spring-heeled Jack ain’t the worst monster prowling tonight,” he muttered, fading into the shadows.

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22 days ago

What a character is this Jack! Highly enjoyable reading, with the shivery reference to another Jack to round off the sense of foreboding and spookiness. Our Jack’s rhyming couplets do seem to have a double reference to himself and the moon, giving an even more interesting aspect to the story.

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Emily O'Leary
Emily O'Leary(@emily-oleary)
1 month ago

I absolutely love this! Very creepy with his sing-song voice. This is written so well, it flows perfectly, well done!

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago

Hello, Carrie. I like it. Especially this line, “Some see me here, some over there. Some see me everywhere.”- it reflects the beauty and the power of the moon. The creepy thing makes your story more beautiful. It is great and well-written. Well done.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
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1 month ago

You’re welcome, Carrie.

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Reply to  Carrie OLeary
1 month ago

Thanks for your sharp eyes, Carrie. It’s fixed now.

Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
1 month ago

A truly creepy character in the way he talks, moves and acts. Is he based on a real character? Perhaps Jack the Ripper? A disturbing read, Carrie.

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Preston Randall
Preston Randall(@preston-randall)
1 month ago

What a great creepy character you’ve created Carrie. The rhyming speech is especially effective, and I love the ending where he fades into the shadows. Well done!

Thompson Emate
Thompson Emate(@thompson-emate)
1 month ago

I love this story, Carrie. It’s like watching a superhero movie.

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 month ago

I’ve never heard of this character before, Carrie and, after reading the Wikipedia link, I wonder why that is. The story is incredible. I too imagine him dressed as a gentleman with amazing agility! We know so much more about Jack the Ripper, I guess because of the murders. Thank you for introducing me to Spring-heeled Jack. I love how you have captured him perfectly in your story and the sing-song voice adds even more to his personality. Really interesting stuff and a brilliant read!

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Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
1 month ago

I am curious Carrie-how did you write on the image? Do you have a special app? Also where do you find your free images?

allinonefitness steven jenkins
allinonefitness steven jenkins(@allinonefitness-steven-jenkins)
26 days ago

Creepy stuff, Creepy  😮 

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