Sisters in spirit, they chanted and twirled, dancing beneath a midnight sky. They were one with the earth, blades of grass crunching between toes.

As their tempo increased, so did the wind, whipping around them to pebble their flesh, encouraging the fire to crackle and hiss.

Bare arms raised in unison to the Goddess. Five pairs of hands clapped, echoed by the crack of thunder, lightning cleaving the sky in two. Rain crashed down and the sisters laughed, water cooling their sweat slicked skin.

It was in the Earth, Air, Fire and Water, that they felt Spirit embrace them.

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    Carrie OLeary
    Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
    1 year ago

    I love this, Emily. Your words make me feel the sisters invoking the elements, spirit made the hairs rise on my arms ?. Great story.

    Lotchie Carmelo
    Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
    1 year ago

    Hello, Emily. I really enjoyed it. Talking about the element of Earth, Air, Fire, and Water in a few words was amazing. You manage it perfectly. Well done.

    Last edited 1 year ago by Lotchie Carmelo
    Lotchie Carmelo
    Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
    Reply to  Emily O'Leary
    1 year ago

    You’re always welcome.

    Margarida Brei
    Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
    1 year ago

    Tense mystical story, Emily. Well done!

    Thompson Emate
    Thompson Emate(@thompson-emate)
    1 year ago

    I love this story, Emily. It reminds me of my traditional folklore. Are the sisters, members of a cult? I’m sure It was a rigorous chanting for the water to cool down, “their sweat slicked skin.”

    Linda Rock
    Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
    1 year ago

    How beautifully you write, Emily! Any story that involves dance captures my attention! I’ve always felt that everyone should dance in the rain! I love how your story brings all the elements to life and that last line is magical. Absolutely perfect!

    Christer Norrlof
    Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
    1 year ago

    You have done a great job including and describing the presence of the four elements in your story, Emily! A very lively and haunting story!
    I’m wondering about the five pairs of hands, though. Is Spirit the fifth element?

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