It was a cold and rainy late autumn day. The leaves had already changed to their bright colours and were beginning to fall, signalling the end of one season and the start of another. Mary and her lover were saying goodbye at Fleetwood station, as he departed for Pennsylvania on a month-long business trip and Mary went to Chicago. 

His heart swelled with joy knowing Mary was so fond of him. It instilled confidence, and a sense-of-place in him, that he’d return and she’d still be there for him. 

The inside of Mary’s train window was a perfectly fogged canvas, and Mary used it to pen a love message that he knew would be etched in his mind the entire train ride down to Penn station. 

She wrote slowly… “I”… then “love” … then “Bob,” followed by pressing her lips to the window, finally waving goodbye before walking away. 

Mary’s lover was satisfied and began walking away. He suddenly stopped dead in his tracks. He looked back longingly at the window, and slowly mouthed “my…name…is…John.”

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 month ago

Hi Sirgeo, welcome to Voice.club. Poor John, what an awful thing to happen to him. I do hope he finds someone a little more deserving next time round. Good job.

Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
1 month ago

A warm welcome to Voice.Club Sirgeo. What can I say be oh-oh!

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago

Hello, Sirgeo. A warm welcome to the voice club. What a heartache on John’s part. I wish he could find someone he deserves. Well done for a very nice and surprising ending. 

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
Reply to  Sirgeo Garfeild
1 month ago

You’re most welcome, Sirgeo. How are you?

Preston Randall
Preston Randall(@preston-randall)
1 month ago

Well, that was quite a shock! Did you consider introducing John’s identical twin Bob as an alternative ending?  😄 

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 month ago

Whoops! That is definitely not the love message John was looking to remember on his journey home! I loved the build-up to the twist at the end, Sirgeo. Nicely done! Welcome to the club!

Bella Minyo
Bella Minyo(@bella-minyo)
1 month ago

Welcome to Voice.Club, Sirgeo! The twist at the end of your story made me audibly say, “Oh snap!” I wonder what the conversation must have been like when John and Mary met back up again. A very enjoyable read!

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