As Time Passes
She laughed as she grabbed his hand, dragging him further into the forest. Dry leaves crunched as they ran together, the wind flying through her auburn hair. He smiled to himself, glad he had finally asked her out. He tripped and fell, pulling her down with him. She giggled and lay on the ground, swishing her arms and trying to make snow angels in the leaves…
The leaves fell as she tugged on his arm, dragging him along the now familiar path through the forest. Every autumn they came. Without fail. Leaves were tangled in her hair, but she didn’t seem to notice as she turned briefly, grinning at him, her eyes full of love. He reached into his pocket, reassuring himself that the ring was still there. Perfect. Right beside his angel coin, which he rubbed for luck. He dropped to one knee, calling her name…
She tugged on his arm as they walked slowly through the woods. The leaves split and crumbled as he carefully made his way over them. Her auburn hair fluttered in the breeze, getting caught in twigs and she frowned in concentration as she untangled them. He collapsed to the ground, opening the delicate box. His daughter knelt beside him, and carefully, they spread the ashes across the fragile leaves. He heard her laugh echoing through the forest and he smiled. A real angel now.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleBeautiful in its simplicity, the similarities between the three paragraphs lull the reader into a complacency which is then upturned. What could have been a sad moment was turned into an encouraging ending.
Ava, the progression in your story is lovely, from the first date to a life together to the end of the line for their physical love. I truly enjoyed reading your story’s take on the prompt.
Thank you so much! I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThis is a lovely story, Aya. I love the flow and the break into different timelines. Well done.
Thank you! I thought that would be a fun way to do it, so I’m glad you liked it!
Hello, Ava. I also love the progression of your story from dating until death separating them together physically. I love this sweet love story. Well done.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThanks! I like that you noted a physical separation, because I agree, I think they’re still connected 🙂
You’re always welcome, Ava R.
Sad sweet story, Ava. I liked the unexpected transition from fiancee to daughter.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you! I tried to make it rather unexpected, so I’m glad it was!
I didn’t see that ending coming, Ava! But it is a beautiful story. Sadly, death happens but we all wish for special signs and they will find them there every autumn. Heartwarming ?
Such a poignant story, Ava. That final paragraph… a surprise reveal. Heartwarming and beautifully written.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleA huge congratulations, Ava.