I remember the first time I knew I loved you. That’s crazy, right? One arguably insignificant moment that occurred ten years ago… I still remember. I always will. You’d just gotten out of class and, as always, rushed to meet me at your house. We claimed that oak tree in your parents’ garden as our own. We sat underneath it, your warm hands clutching my cold ones. You’d come out to your parents the week before, so we could finally show our affection with no shame of being seen. I remember the smell of your coconut shampoo, the taste of your post-school mango smoothie, the way your eyes shone in the light of the setting sun, the sound of your breath catching when you realised that I was going to kiss you. And just like the leaves on the oak tree, we fell.

And I fell every time I saw you. At our wedding, during the holidays, after we had our first child, even in every argument we had, I fell. I fell until I broke away and gave you all of the pieces.

Now, I watch you as you pack the last of your things. You leave the pumpkin we carved earlier with our son on the kitchen table. I waited to see if you’d remember it or even glance at it, but you didn’t. You don’t make eye contact with me as you brush past with a box in your hands.

“Jenny.” I start.

“Alissa, stop.” Your voice quivers and I stop. We fall a little bit more.

I couldn’t stop for much longer, and that was one of the things you hated about me. I just didn’t know when to stop.

“What about Isaiah?” I say.

Your eyes soften at the sound of our son’s name. “You heard what the lawyers said. I go. You stay.”

“But what if you didn’t? What if you kept on loving me? What if we fall again?”

“We are falling, Lissy.”

And just like the autumn leaves, we fell, only this time, instead of falling in love, we fell apart.

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Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
24 days ago

Welcome to Voice.Club, Nicole. Thank you for this story. Why did the couple have to part?

Preston Randall
Preston Randall(@preston-randall)
23 days ago

I loved this unique contrast and comparison between falling in love and falling apart. The first paragraph really caught my attention with its detailed descriptions and characterizations and the dialogue that followed felt real. Excellent!

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
21 days ago

A warm welcome to voice club, Nicole. Your story is very emotional. I could feel every emotion that you portrayed. Preston is right. The unique contrast and comparison between falling in love and falling apart are lovely. Job well done. Keep on writing. 

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
20 days ago

This is so beautiful, Nicole. The words of Bonnie Tyler’s ‘Total Eclipse of the Heart’ come to mind… ‘Once upon a time I was falling in love, now I’m only falling apart’. You describe so well those last hours of parting. Lovely writing, I hope to read more from you.

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