My sister is the one I miss the most. We had been close our whole lives, barely ever apart until now. She is my junior by just over a year but a lot of the time she feels older than me, sometimes as old as the universe itself. It seems to me as though she will never die. As a dead person myself, my sister is also the one I look for the most as I spend my days up here by the Great Window. Sometimes she is almost invisible, and I have to squint hard to see her hazy form amongst the millions of others meandering across the Window’s pearly surface. At times she flickers like a phantom and I fear that I will lose sight of her completely. But I don’t, I never do. I wondered at first if I wouldn’t be able to distinguish her shape, but I found I could, practically straight away. Amidst the endless floating currents of the other auras, there she was. My sister appeared to me as rosy in colour, with hints of orange and red like a new sunset. The first time I saw her I broke down in sobs; it was always how I imagined my sister’s soul to be. It is beautiful. Perfect, even. I was told later that those you love are always easiest to see. Each day, my devoted eyes follow her, seeing her colour at times slowly deepen and flourish, and at others fade until my heart constricts with worry. Every time I look, however, she is there, as I like to think she will always be. Though I know it’s against the rules, I sometimes reach out and gently touch her little aura as it swims across the Great Window. Fleetingly, her colour blooms and she seems to me just like a piece of real sunset, warm and strong, and my heart nearly breaks with the desire to be with her on Earth again. In these moments I close my eyes and can almost hear her breathe. It is a steady sound, constant, everlasting.
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Shreya Dhital
Shreya Dhital(@shreya-dhital)
2 years ago

Very beautiful and creative ?

Melissa Taggart
Melissa Taggart(@melissa-taggart)
2 years ago

This is a very beautiful and well formed story. I enjoyed reading it!

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Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
2 years ago

This is a very moving story, a bridge between two worlds. I love your concept of the “Great Window”, where our older sister gazes into the world she has left behind; I love how important it is to her that she keep her beloved younger sister in sight. Both worlds are represented well by the words you choose.  “Pearly”, “phantom”, “floating” and “auras” connect us with the Other World; the sunset description, reaching out to touch, almost hearing her breathe – all of these bring us back to Earth and to human experiences. I have read and re-read this story many times, and enjoy it more on each successive reading. I would suggest one possible change. I think it would be easier to read if it were broken up into four paragraphs: The first paragraph, ending with “she will never die” sets the stage but doesn’t yet tell the reader about both worlds. The second paragraph, ending with “I never do” pulls the reader into the bridge between worlds and lets us know this is not just a story about the bond between two sisters, but much more. The third paragraph, ending with “she will always be” paints the beauty of a soul and of a love that… Read more »

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Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
2 years ago

Beautifully written. I was hoping to hear you say that when you touched her, she smiled, and said – sister is that you?

Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi(@katy-bizi)
2 years ago

Such I sweet story! In only a few words you managed to create something beautiful. Well done!

musing mind
musing mind(@musing-mind)
2 years ago

Such a heart warming story.

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Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
2 years ago

Beautiful Emilia, my eyes are a little misty after reading it but I loved it! Today is my late Nan’s birthday and I’d love to think she was out there watching me through the Great Window. Thank you!

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
2 years ago

What a lovely story that gives a sense of hope. I think what many of us fear is not being able to check on our loved ones when we are no longer here.

Susan Dawson
Susan Dawson(@susan-dawson)
1 year ago

This is so simple. Focussing on the one allows all the concepts of this version of afterlife to shine through.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

This story connects the two worlds. I read it two times, and I love it so much. I have my 2 younger sisters too, and love them both as you do. I love the way you give importance to your younger sister that you always follow her with your eyes. I was engaged and touched.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 year ago

You describe the ‘Great Window’ so beautifully Emilia that I felt I was gazing through it with the sister. Although there were moments of sadness, there was a feeling of peace that flowed through your story. Very moving.

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