Timeless Affection
The stars were dispersed embellishing the night sheet. Elise sat on the porch staring at the sky.
“Oh! The sky is beautiful.”
“It’s as beautiful as you are.”
“I’m flattered.”
“Please don’t. In my heart, your beauty will be timeless. Enduring like the stars in the sky.”
“Oh! Ethan.”
She rested her head on his shoulder beaming with smiles.
The door flung open.
“Elise dear, I’m done. I’ve fixed the lights. Can we have dinner?”
She turned to look at him.
“Why the smile? I look dishevelled.”
“No. You look as handsome and poetic as the man I first met.”
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThere is the flatterer and Elsie, but who is the third person? Great line, “Enduring like the stars in the sky.”
There’s no third person. It’s a story with retrospection. Thank you for loving that line.
Hello, Thompson. You really portrayed their timeless affection. I wish all couple lovers are like them. How sweet. Well done.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYes, it’ll be a very good thing. Thank you for looking up my story.
You’re welcome, Thompson.
The story starts with a romantic scene and lovely words are spoken between them, but I get lost in the story when the door opens behind them and another person is speaking.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThompson can correct me if I’m wrong, but I think there are only two people in this story, not three. If you know that, you might read it again with a different understanding. I thought this story was brilliant. Elise’s memories transcend time, and make us believe, if just for a second, that she’s talking to someone other than her husband. It’s a good lesson in how to keep a marriage alive… Read more »
Yes Fuji, you’re truly correct. There are just two people in the scene. Elise only went down memory lane. Thank you, Fuji for the hearty comments.
It was only a back-and-forth scene. There are just two people, Elise and her husband.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleHello Thompson. I wish I could give this story more than one vote! You’ve said so much with such a few, carefully chosen words. I can see the younger Elise and Ethan – so much in love and so expressive! I can also see the older, happily matured couple. Love has many different flavors, and these two are tasting them all! Great writing.
Thank you, Fuji. I’m glad that you now understand the story deeply.
Wonderful use of dialogue and setting to contrast the poetic with the practical, and meld the two into a timeless love story.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you Voice – Team. I’m honoured.
Congratulations, Thompson, on reaching the final. Very well done!
Thank you, Linda. It’s an honour. Many blessings and Merry Christmas.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleMerry Christmas to you too, Thompson, and all the very best for 2023.