The handsome prince stands at the foot of the tower and recites his well-worn lines.

“Rapunzel, let down your golden hair!”

A lilting voice answers, “I cut off that tangled mess long ago. I’m a flapper now! Come join the party!”

“But how …”

“I installed a lift, silly.”

“But the evil sorceress …”

“Is over in the corner, playing a mean bari sax. Hurry up! I need a fresh dance partner.”

“This is loads more fun than those old tales I usually star in.” The prince grins, taps his feet, jumps into the sleek Art Deco elevator.

“I’m coming, Punzi!”

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Voice-Team
Voice-Team(@voice-team)
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1 month ago

A brilliant updating of a classic fairy tale to a jazzy setting. Energy and wit here to make you not only smile but laugh out loud. 

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
2 months ago

😂 This one made me smile, Fuji. Good job!

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
2 months ago

Now you’re talking, Fuji! The 1920s, my favourite era. I’ve just expanded an old Voice-Club micro of mine, ‘Prohibition Bound’ and am about to enter it into a short story competition based on the Roaring Twenties. I love your take on the Rapunzel fairy tale. Makes me want to take that lift and join the party! Great story!

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
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1 month ago

The competition is being run by Globe Soup (there are 5 different prompts to choose from) and only the winners will be shown on their Winners Page in November. I will definitely self-publish my story on Amazon Kindle either as it stands or extend it further. We were allowed 4000 words and, after researching the era, there was some material that I would have liked to have added but couldn’t due to the word count. I really appreciate your interest, Fuji, and will keep you updated.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
2 months ago

What a funny and modern take on Rapunzel. You have me smiling, Fuji. Nicely done. 

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
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1 month ago

You’re most welcome, Fuji.

Preston Randall
Preston Randall(@preston-randall)
2 months ago

It takes a special talent to make people laugh, and this one definitely accomplished that! You definitely have a twisted take on things, and I mean that in the best possible way. My two favourites: using the nick-name “Punzi,” and the “Art Deco elevator.”  😀 

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Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
2 months ago

Fuji, your story is an absolutely hilarious retelling of Grimm’s fairy tale Rapunzel. Great imagination to reset the story during the Roaring Twenties and install an Art Decor lift! Superb contrast to Thompson’s mystique histoire, which I just read.

Thompson Emate
Thompson Emate(@thompson-emate)
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1 month ago

That’s funny, Margarida. 😀😃😄

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 month ago

Congratulations to another great story, Fuji. Hilarious! It’s surprising and different in so many ways, for example that the twist comes already in the beginning of the story. I also love the dialogue, the girl’s new name and the changes she has undergone. Very nice!

Thompson Emate
Thompson Emate(@thompson-emate)
1 month ago

Fuji, I love this twist to the Rapunzel’s story. It’s an excellent write.

Thompson Emate
Thompson Emate(@thompson-emate)
1 month ago

Double congratulations to you, Fuji. A very well-deserved win.

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Heather Chrzanowski
Heather Chrzanowski(@heather-chrzanowski)
1 month ago

Loved this Fuji! Your stories are always imaginative and never disappoint! Congratulations!

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 month ago

Congratulations Fuji! You already know how much I loved this story!

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