Punzi Bobs Her Hair
The handsome prince stands at the foot of the tower and recites his well-worn lines.
“Rapunzel, let down your golden hair!”
A lilting voice answers, “I cut off that tangled mess long ago. I’m a flapper now! Come join the party!”
“But how …”
“I installed a lift, silly.”
“But the evil sorceress …”
“Is over in the corner, playing a mean bari sax. Hurry up! I need a fresh dance partner.”
“This is loads more fun than those old tales I usually star in.” The prince grins, taps his feet, jumps into the sleek Art Deco elevator.
“I’m coming, Punzi!”
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleA brilliant updating of a classic fairy tale to a jazzy setting. Energy and wit here to make you not only smile but laugh out loud.
? This one made me smile, Fuji. Good job!
Thanks so much, Carrie. I had a great time writing this one!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleNow you’re talking, Fuji! The 1920s, my favourite era. I’ve just expanded an old Voice-Club micro of mine, ‘Prohibition Bound’ and am about to enter it into a short story competition based on the Roaring Twenties. I love your take on the Rapunzel fairy tale. Makes me want to take that lift and join the party! Great story!
I remember your Prohibition story well, Linda. In fact, when I was writing my Punzi tale, I thought, “Linda will love this – she’s a great fan of flappers!” I would love to read your extended Prohibition story – will it be available anywhere for the public?
The competition is being run by Globe Soup (there are 5 different prompts to choose from) and only the winners will be shown on their Winners Page in November. I will definitely self-publish my story on Amazon Kindle either as it stands or extend it further. We were allowed 4000 words and, after researching the era, there was some material that I would have liked to have added but couldn’t due to… Read more »
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThat’s exciting, Linda. Yes, please do keep me updated, although I’m not sure if I can handle reading 4000 words!! I’m so used to micros and flash fiction. ?
What a funny and modern take on Rapunzel. You have me smiling, Fuji. Nicely done.
I’m so glad to make you smile, Lotchie! Your comments mean a lot to me.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYou’re most welcome, Fuji.
It takes a special talent to make people laugh, and this one definitely accomplished that! You definitely have a twisted take on things, and I mean that in the best possible way. My two favourites: using the nick-name “Punzi,” and the “Art Deco elevator.” ?
I will gladly accept the “twisted take” label, Preston! I’m happy you liked my flapper’s new name and I have to say, I fell in love with that picture of the Art Deco elevator from the NYC Chrysler Building. What a find for this story!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleFuji, your story is an absolutely hilarious retelling of Grimm’s fairy tale Rapunzel. Great imagination to reset the story during the Roaring Twenties and install an Art Decor lift! Superb contrast to Thompson’s mystique histoire, which I just read.
Thanks so much Margarida. This story was so much fun to write and to research! I got to look at all kinds of Art Deco pictures and flapper costumes. Oh, the perks of being a writer …
That’s funny, Margarida. ???
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleCongratulations to another great story, Fuji. Hilarious! It’s surprising and different in so many ways, for example that the twist comes already in the beginning of the story. I also love the dialogue, the girl’s new name and the changes she has undergone. Very nice!
Fuji, I love this twist to the Rapunzel’s story. It’s an excellent write.
Double congratulations to you, Fuji. A very well-deserved win.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleLoved this Fuji! Your stories are always imaginative and never disappoint! Congratulations!
Congratulations Fuji! You already know how much I loved this story!