As the most trusted maiden of the queen, I was a role model to all younglings.

But no one could teach better than the queen. From her significant journeys she has taught all under her rule that no one can ever be trusted. She’d made decisions that she regrets and ones that she smiles upon. But she has told me that she is slowly giving in again. She trusts me and she believes me.

So here I am, in the middle of nowhere because my mistress has banished me for her own health. She tells me I should stay away from others. I possess the kindness that no human on Earth can ever possess. I possess the trust that encourages others to lean on my shoulder.

That is why I am dangerous. To my kin, to my family, and most of all to my leader.

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Fuji
Fuji (@fuji)
1 year ago

What an interesting story, Ila. A new take on the concept of “trust”. You’re a good writer with a unique point of view.

musing mind
musing mind (@musing-mind)
1 year ago

To be able to have others trust is a big asset. Loved your story with the twist about trust.

Leena Auckel
Leena Auckel (@leena-auckel)
1 year ago

A nice read on the concept of trust. Short and sweet.

Sandra James
Sandra James (@sandra-james)
1 year ago

A very interesting story, Ila. I am sure everyone who reads it will take something different from it but all will reflect on what trust means to them.

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe (@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago

A lovely short story, and yes you have shown that you don’t need to over dress and use too many words. Also a very valid point in that when it come to trust, there are very few who have the courage to do so. You told this, as only you can!

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Susan Dawson
Susan Dawson (@susan-dawson)
1 year ago

A powerful story told in minimum words

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

A very powerful short story about trust. Great job, Ila.

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