I wanted to see the sun shine, but…
I wanted to admire the sun dance in the trees, but…
I wanted to eat a peach kissed by the sun, but…
I wanted to race my shadow across a meadow, but…
I wanted to bathe in the sun’s golden light, but…
I wanted to taste the ripeness of summer, but…
Living miles below the earth’s surface there were no seasons. No summer. There was a constant grey and eternal cold which bit to my very bone. Reading a very distant relative’s journal made me long for summer sun. The traitor sun imploded centuries before I was born. So we lived like moles in the semi-darkness. I felt like a mole – grey, partly blind and forever underground.
The journal read, “Today we had a summer picnic on the beach before cascading into the sea. Unfortunately, the summer sun burnt my skin…”
How dare my ancestor complain about the sun! Didn’t she realise how very fortunate she was to be able to play outside in the glorious sun!
My days were so empty because all I could do now was dream about summer. All I could do was to read about summer. After taking the monthly injection of nutrition, minerals and fortified vitamins, I slumped on my bed. Burying deeper for warmth, I fell into a dream. I was walking on Earth on a glorious summer day idolising the sun-kissed trees and flowers. I admired the loveliness of a peach before taking a giant bite. It turned to cinders in my mouth. A terrible bang ricochetted. The sun imploded and the very atmosphere was on fire. I screamed myself awake as terror galloped through my veins. Once more I knew the sun-
…had imploded.
…humans had polluted the earth so scant vegetation grew.
…anything growing on earth was highly toxic.
…no sun rays meant no shadows.
…the sun no longer existed.
…summer was a far away once upon a time dream.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThe repetitive nature of this story’s opening was definitely a successful hook. The reader is immediately drawn into wanting to soothe the protagonist, to assuage his sadness. Earth’s sadness. A dystopian future we must guard against.

This is so unique, and I love the imagery! Makes me grateful for the sun and the hot summer days. Good job, Margarida!
Thank you for your rich praise Amy.
Summer is my very favourite season, so it is odd that I wrote a dismal story other than I like jolting readers awake with environmental issues.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThis, in part, reminded me of Hugh Howey’s ‘Wool’ series where they all live in underground silos because the air is too toxic to breathe. But then your story made me question what would happen if Earth didn’t have a sun to orbit. Would we just drift aimlessly through space along with the rest of the space garbage that we’ve created? Lovely descriptions and a very thought-provoking read.
Glad that I stirred up a lot of questions. Thank you for comparing my story to “Wool.” I definitely will have to check out the author.
This is a well written scenario of an earth I hope we never encounter. It’s descriptive in a positive light only to sink into a dark forbidden and unholy world. Well done, Margarida.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleDeborah, thank you for your flattering comments. I wrote this rather morbid yet question provoking story in a similar way to another entitled “Colourless.” You can read my story here –
https://voice.club/gems/27615/2021-gems-01-colourless
I agree with Carrie, this has shades of the “wool” series. I enjoyed your dystopian view of summer
Summer should be rimful of wonderful times, beauty and joy, and yet I wrote a sad tale!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI just wanted to point out my cunning strange style. Each opening sentence is continued in its corresponding closing sentence. Thus the second sentence reads, “I wanted to admire the sun dance in the trees, but humans had polluted the earth so scant vegetation grew.”
i love the way you structured this story, a really great read.
Lisa, much gratitude for your compliments. I love experimenting in my writing.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleA great story, Margarida! The past and the future connecting through a journal that carries promises of joy and fun through the simple things. The bleak reality of a catastrophe and a life lost in the dark are such powerful elements in this tale. Yes, we should treat our sun and what we enjoy with respect on this planet, without taking it for granted…
Thank you, Greene for your rich insight.
The sun is such a powerful energy source, yet it is so underused.
Hello Margarida – Stories like this are so important in these days of Climate Despair. I’ve said elsewhere that we need to appreciate what we have in order to protect it. Your story helps us remember the miraculous world we still have … can we save it? Let’s keep trying!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you, Julie for your feedback. We have so many resources that we should conserve and use wisely.
Hello, Margarida. What a nice and unique style of connecting those opening sentences to each corresponding closing sentences. I thorough enjoyed it. Thanks for the new ideas. Well done for a very well-written piece.
Thanks for your warm comments which are so welcome, Lotchi.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleApologies, I mean Lotchie.
No, Margarida. You don’t need to apologize. It is fine.