
The Phoenix Curse
They sat beneath the apple trees, making the most of their precious time. Shay reached up and plucked an apple, holding it out to her.
“My father’s insisting on holding a ball. He wants me to select a bride.”
Eleanora swallowed down the lump in her throat. She took the proffered apple and held it to her nose, inhaling the sweet fragrance, intent on hiding her emotions.
Shay cupped her cheek gently. “I only want you, Nora.”
“But what of my curse?” she cried. “My mother never bore a child. What if I can’t? You’d never have an heir. You know the nature of my coming into the world, that I was born of my mother’s phoenix flames as she died. If I can’t have a child either, I’d have to die to give you an heir.”
“I don’t care about an heir,” said Shay vehemently, pulling her into his arms. “We were always meant to be together. All I want is you.”
“Yes, but you are also forgetting that I am little more than a servant. I lost the title of Lady Ashworth when I supposedly died of the same illness as father.” Her breath hitched. “I died when I was twelve for all the world knows. Who is ever going to believe that my stepmother’s kitchen rat is the true Lady Ashworth?”
“I think we should go and talk to my father.”
“Talk to the King,” gasped Eleanora. “‘I can’t walk into the palace looking like this.” She stepped out of his embrace, suddenly remembering how dirty she was.
He looked her up and down. “Perhaps not,” he said, “When I see you, I see far beyond the ragged clothes you wear and the soot on your nose. I see beyond your beauty. I see the goodness of your heart and the pure, shining light of the phoenix in your soul. How could I ever take another for my wife when perfection stands before me?”
Eleanora rubbed at the smudge on her nose, a tear sliding down her cheek. “You really think your father can help?”
“I do.”
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThe order of Eleanora’s stories is:
1 – https://voice.club/story/fiction/53431/2023-zengarden-01-the-birth-of-a-legend
2 – https://voice.club/story/fiction/53534/2023-zengarden-01-kitchen-rat
3 – https://voice.club/story/fiction/53555/2023-zengarden-01-no-place-to-go
4 – https://voice.club/story/fiction/52667/2023-flash-02-a-few-stolen-moments
5 – https://voice.club/story/fiction/53183/2023-zengarden-01-the-phoenix-curse
6 – https://voice.club/story/fiction/52950/2023-zengarden-01-phoenix-rising
7 – https://voice.club/story/fiction/53332/2023-zengarden-01-if-i-cant-have-him-no-one-can
I won’t be adding anymore of her stories to Voice.club as I’m working on putting them all together for my book of fairytale retellings. Thank you so much for reading, and hopefully enjoying her story 🙂
Hi Carrie, you already know that I am enjoying your Eleanora series. As usual you weave all your stories together beautifully although, to quote Morecombe and Wise, not necessarily in the right order. in this episode you have introduced her birth from the ashes of her mother and her concern that the concern will apply to her too. Prince Shay’s love and desire for her comes over in spades and as readers… Read more »
Thank you for your kind comment, Julian. I’m really enjoying writing these stories and it’s certainly giving my brain a workout. I rarely write my longer short stories in chronological order. I’m not one of those who can sit and plot out a story. I know the beginning and the end and the characters guide me through the rest, which leads to lots of sleepless nights and carrying notebooks and pencils everywhere.… Read more »
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYou are definitely keeping us in suspense by not answering why someone shouted, “No!” when the Prince proposed to her in the first story.
I really like the poetry and music in this line,” I see the goodness of your heart and the pure, shining light of the phoenix in your soul.”
Thanks for reading and commenting, Margarida. Yes, Prince Séamus is a little lyrical when it comes to the love of his life. I may eventually reveal the ‘No’ on here, but I don’t want to give away too much about the end of the story before the rest of it is written. I rarely write in chronological order. I know the beginning and the end, but the characters guide me through the… Read more »
Each riveting chapter in Eleanora’s story, Carrie, reveals more about her and this is what I love. I agree with Julian’s ‘not necessarily in the right order’ 😄 but, having read your response, I understand why. Myself, I start with bullet points, each one guiding me through although, like others, my story often takes me in different directions. I too loved the line that Margarida mentions. Beautifully written. Looking forward… Read more »
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you, Linda, and for your understanding of my slightly haphazard writing style. We can’t all be the same can we! 😂 I’m happy people are enjoying Shay’s response to Eleanora.
I love how you put us wondering about who shouted “No!” in your previous story of Eleanora. This turns more exciting. And yes, I do also love the line that Margarida mentions. It’s rhyming. I fell in love with it. Well done.
Thank you, Lotchie. Yes, I’ve gone back in time with this one to before the ball. My ‘Prince Charming’ knows exactly who his ‘Cinderella’ is in my retelling of the fairytale. I’m glad that you enjoyed Shay’s little speech to her. He isn’t afraid of speaking of his love for her. Nora, on the other hand is so hung up on her concerns of not being able to produce an heir that… Read more »
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleHi Voice-team. If you get a minute, would you mind changing ‘I can’t step into the palace’ to ‘I can’t walk into the palace’ in paragraph 9. I have ‘she stepped’ out of his embrace’ in the next line and I don’t like having the same verb that close together. Thank you.
Done. Good change!
Thank you 😊
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleOkay, you got me hooked. I am giving up my daytime TV soap operas in lieu of reading your continuing stories! 🤗
😂 thank you. So glad you’re enjoying my Eleanora stories so much 🙂