“Insipid!” hissed with vehemence. Is this what he thought of me? I felt like someone grabbed my throat.

“Boring! Colourless!” Hearing his words describe me, the stranglehold on my throat increased.

“Vacuous!” Did he think me unintelligent?

“Nothing compared to our women with hair the colour of exotic moonlight! They are bred as warriors from the cradle. A hot blend of fiery spices, burning ice and animal fury. Effortlessly, they kill wild beasts, gut them, then roast them rather than eat weeds out of the soil. Kiss me my precious.”

Angry lava rampaged through my arteries as I burst into the room. Nonchalantly, he leaned against the mantelpiece staring at the door waiting for me to barge in. He was gloating. Gloating and alone.

“Why you.. Why you….!” I sputtered and he laughed at my discomfort. Finally, I blurted, “Oh so you were complaining about me, in hopes to make me stronger? Do you really prefer your women?”

It was all too much, and I burst into tears.

“Shush, fair one. The women in my world are too hell-bent on destruction, too fiery-tempered and in love with themselves. You little one, know your own worth – even if you eat weeds. Vegetarian? You look like a frail flower but have the strength of a universe. I hear your enchanting laugh and fall in love all over again. You smell of fresh running brooks, clear skies and mountain flowers. Wherever you go, you leave a sweet taste of innocence. The way you gently touched that injured animal demonstrates that you are pure. You, my dear, have a soul; it is this sense which makes you more beautiful to me. 

Your hair is woven with gold threads
Threads like lightning of goodness
Goodness in thoughts, feelings and actions are a real part of you
You are my Juliet, but we will write a different tale
Tale of two star-crossed contradicts who fell in love and stayed in love
 Love will lead us to that secret part of my country where opposites can stay together
Together, we will better each other’s souls.”  

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    Carrie OLeary
    Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
    28 days ago

    I enjoyed this story Margarida, but I would love to read a longer version, to know how these two came to be together in the first place, to know more about their origins and backgrounds. I know it is a follow-up to your earlier story, but I feel there could be so much more to it. It has me truly intrigued. Nicely done.

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    Lotchie Carmelo
    Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
    28 days ago

    Hello, Margarida. I love your words, “Insipid!” “..hair the colour of exotic moonlight” “woven with Gold threads” “Threads like lightning of goodness” … I found it more magical and sweet. Lovely! Well done.

    Lotchie Carmelo
    Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
    Reply to  Margarida Brei
    27 days ago

    Wow. Thanks for imparting your knowledge to me, Margarida. I appreciate it so much.
    I hope I can apply it to my poem. I am working on it. But a little busy with my schooling. I am on my practicum until December 15, 2023.

    Last edited 27 days ago by Lotchie Carmelo
    Lotchie Carmelo
    Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
    Reply to  Margarida Brei
    24 days ago

    Reading and writing is my best hobby. Also, I love playing volleyball. What I am hoping to do in the future? My future might be a Businesswoman. I am fond of doing business. And for now, after finishing my schooling I need to work locally or abroad to gather capital.

    Deborah Goulding
    Deborah Goulding(@deborah-goulding)
    27 days ago

    As always, your story delivers much depth and a thought provoking response. Your protagonist has overcome insecurities to find her self worth. Well done, Margarida.

    Deborah Goulding
    Deborah Goulding(@deborah-goulding)
    26 days ago

    Congratulations Margarida on your big, much deserved win! Wohoo! So happy for you! You should be very proud of yourself, and how you help others is a great attribute!!!!!!

    Julie Harris
    Julie Harris(@julie-harris)
    Reply to  Deborah Goulding
    26 days ago

    I second Deborah’s exuberant congratulations, Margarida. We are all delighted to have you join us in these wonderful Writing Events. One thing that really impressed me was the wide variety of your stories in this particular Event – from putrid jelly beans to angel/devil love to another side of a wicked witch to a prince who’d rather be a frog – you never seem to run out of inspiration. I also love… Read more »

    Reply to  Margarida Brei
    26 days ago

    Hello Margarida – Here is what we wrote in the email that was sent out to all members to announce the Free Pass for August:

    Five Senses Writing Event

    We will award a six-month free Writing Subscription to the most engaging author participating in this event. The winning author will be determined by the quality of their pictures, submissions, comments, and author’s bio.

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